tvth_04
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Dear teacher,
I'm self learning English to take TOEFL exams. Please help me correct my essay below. Thanks in advance.
As a child, I used to go to the zoo with my parents, then I felt very happy to see wild animals. However, now I do not agree with fact that wild animals are being captured in the zoo. Because capturing animals will make them suffer and loss of freedom.
Captive animals might lose their instincts to in wild habitat. The zoo often separate baby animals from their parents too early to learn survival skills. For example, animals such as lions, tigers and any other kind of predators often hunt to survive. Without parents, these animals have no way to learn hunting techniques. Being captured for long period in the zoo, they might also lose their skills gradually. For instance, those animals provided human processed food for a long time might face difficulty in finding and eating food in the wild when they are sent back to their habitats.
Many people say that the zoo will teach children to understand wild animals lives better. Unfortunately this is not true in most of cases. On the contrary, zoos provide the distorted images of the wild animals that are kept in artificial environments. As in the case of Arturo, an unfortunate polar bear used to live in a zoo in Argentina, we brought to our children a bad example of wildlife abuse. Polar bears should live in a very low temperautre environment like the Arctic instead of in a subtropical area of Argentina. Not only did the zoo constrain Arturo by high temperature, but also mentally by loneliness.
In sum, though some people may oppose this, people should give animals an opportunity to live in normal surroundings. Animals exist in this world without purpose to amuse and teach people. If people want to help them, they have to protect the wild world, and not to destroy it.
I'm self learning English to take TOEFL exams. Please help me correct my essay below. Thanks in advance.
As a child, I used to go to the zoo with my parents, then I felt very happy to see wild animals. However, now I do not agree with fact that wild animals are being captured in the zoo. Because capturing animals will make them suffer and loss of freedom.
Captive animals might lose their instincts to in wild habitat. The zoo often separate baby animals from their parents too early to learn survival skills. For example, animals such as lions, tigers and any other kind of predators often hunt to survive. Without parents, these animals have no way to learn hunting techniques. Being captured for long period in the zoo, they might also lose their skills gradually. For instance, those animals provided human processed food for a long time might face difficulty in finding and eating food in the wild when they are sent back to their habitats.
Many people say that the zoo will teach children to understand wild animals lives better. Unfortunately this is not true in most of cases. On the contrary, zoos provide the distorted images of the wild animals that are kept in artificial environments. As in the case of Arturo, an unfortunate polar bear used to live in a zoo in Argentina, we brought to our children a bad example of wildlife abuse. Polar bears should live in a very low temperautre environment like the Arctic instead of in a subtropical area of Argentina. Not only did the zoo constrain Arturo by high temperature, but also mentally by loneliness.
In sum, though some people may oppose this, people should give animals an opportunity to live in normal surroundings. Animals exist in this world without purpose to amuse and teach people. If people want to help them, they have to protect the wild world, and not to destroy it.
