In a company as big and influential as Roll Royce

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Please correct any errors in my sentences.

In a company as big and influential as Roll Royce, you'd expect to undertake a lot of challenging projects, which will put to the test not only the knowledge you'd acquired at university, but also your interpersonal skills. It's important to emphasize that the ability you'll use more and therefore develop is problem-solving, without a doubt.
 
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In a company as big and influential as Roll Royce, you'd expect to undertake a lot of challenging projects, which will put to the test not only the knowledge you'd acquired at university, but also your interpersonal skills. It's important to emphasize that, [STRIKE]the ability you'll use more and therefore develop is problem-solving,[/STRIKE] without a doubt, the skills you will acquire and develop and use will focus on problem solving.

OK. In addition to the revision above, first, I don’t like either of the “you’d”s in that context (or maybe any context). Suggest you use “you would” and “you have” respectively. Second, while I’m on contractions, scratch “you’ll” and use full form “you will”.
 
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The company name is Rolls-Royce. In full, it's Rolls-Royce Motor Cars Limited.
 
I would omit the first red "and" in post #2.
 
Say:

In a company as big and influential as Rolls-Royce you expect to undertake s lot of challenging projects, which will put to the test not only the knowledge you acquired at university ....
 
Say:

In a company as big and influential as Rolls-Royce you expect to undertake s lot of challenging projects, which will put to the test not only the knowledge you acquired at university ....

I know your proffer sounds more natural, but is it wrong to say "you would expect" and "had acquired"?
 
OK. In addition to the revision above, first, I don’t like either of the “you’d”s in that context (or maybe any context). Suggest you use “you would” and “you have” respectively. Second, while I’m on contractions, scratch “you’ll” and use full form “you will”.

What's wrong about using contractions?
 
Please correct any errors in my sentences.

In a company as big and influential as Roll Royce, you'd expect to undertake a lot of challenging projects, which will put to the test not only the knowledge you'd acquired at university, but also your interpersonal skills. It's important to emphasize that the ability you'll use more and therefore develop is problem-solving, without a doubt.

What's wrong about using contractions?

For me, it depends on the formality of the piece. If you were writing this to a friend who has applied for a job at Rolls-Royce and you were just trying to give them some friendly advice, I'd keep "It's" and "you'll". I'd use "you should expect" at the beginning (you can't contract that) and simply "you acquired" (so no contraction necessary).

If, however, this was a formal letter from, say, HR at Rolls-Royce giving you some advance information after you applied for a job there, I'd remove the contractions. I'd still use "You should expect" and "you acquired" though.
 
I know your proffer sounds more natural, but is it wrong to say "you would expect" and "had acquired"?

I would expect that in a sentence like:

You would expect that, but you'd be disappointed.
 
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