[Grammar] LETTER

[Hossam.G]

Please, Can you correct the following letter:

With reference to the above mentioned subject and further to all our discussions, you are hereby requested to provide us with the completion date of testing and commissioning related to your scope of work which should not exceed in any case the date of 10/12/2017.
Therefore, we would like to notify you that any delay in testing and commissioning process will badly affect the initial handing over of the project, which will hold you the full responsibility and all consequences that can arise from the delay.
The above is for your information, record and further necessary action.

 

[tedmc]

[STRIKE]Please,[/STRIKE] Can you please correct the following letter?

With reference to the abovementioned subject (what/where is the subject?) and further to all our discussions (when?), you are [STRIKE]hereby[/STRIKE] requested to provide us with the completion date of the testing and commissioning of services [STRIKE]related to[/STRIKE] under your scope of work. [STRIKE]which should not exceed in any case the date of 10/12/2017.[/STRIKE] In any case, we expect the date to be not later than 10/12/2017.

[STRIKE]Therefore, we would like[/STRIKE] We wish to [STRIKE]notify[/STRIKE] remind you that any delay in the testing and commissioning [STRIKE]process[/STRIKE] will [STRIKE]badly[/STRIKE] invariably affect the initial (what do you mean by "initial"? Is the handing over done in stages?) handing over of the project. [STRIKE]which[/STRIKE] We will hold you [STRIKE]the full responsibility and[/STRIKE] responsible for all consequences that [STRIKE]can[/STRIKE] may arise from the delay.

[STRIKE]The above is for your information, record and further necessary action.[/STRIKE] We trust that you will take prompt action on the above matter.

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