"The table illustrates how many times Americans went to fast food restaurants in the years 2003, 2006, and..."

[hardyweineberg]

This is my IELTS task 1 essay, and I have a few questions.
The table illustrates how many times Americans went to fast food restaurants in the years 2003, 2006, and 2013.

Overall, it is clear that most Americans ate at fast food restaurants once a week or once or two times a month. Also, while the proportion of Americans who visited these restaurants once or twice a month and the percentage who visited a few times a year both increased over the given period, the figures for the other categories fell.

In 2003, around 31% of Americans ate in fast food restaurants once a week, compared to about 18% who went several times a week, 5% who never went, and about 3% who went every day. By 2013, all these figures had reduced, with the percentage who went once a week dropping to roughly 28% in 2013 despite a slight rise to approximately 33% in 2006, when it was the highest figure.

Regarding the other categories, 30% ate in fast food restaurants once or twice a month, and after this proportion decreased considerably to 25% in 2006, it grew considerably to around 33%, becoming the highest figure. Additionally, the figure for “a few times a year” rose marginally from nearly 13% in 2003 to 15% in 2006 and then remained stable.

1) Is my introduction okay?

2) Is it okay to say "the figures for the other categories" and "the figures for 'a few times a year'"?

3) Can I refer to a decrease of 5% as "considerable" because it appears big on the graph?

4) Did I "sufficiently" summarise the information on the bar chart?

 

[emsr2d2]

Please refamiliarise yourself with the contents of post #2 in this thread.

 

[teechar]

The [ 1] table chart illustrates how many times the percentages of Americans who went to fast food restaurants in the years 2003, 2006, and 2013, in terms of six frequency categories ranging from daily to never.

Overall, [ 2] it is clear that most Americans those who ate at fast food restaurants once a week, or once or two times a month were the highest two categories. Also, there was little change in most categories over those years. while the proportion of Americans who visited these restaurants once or twice a month and the percentage who visited a few times a year both increased over the given period, the figures for the other categories fell.
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[ 1]: A table is just a grid with numbers (and/or text).

[ 2]: Cut out padding/waffle. You wrote over 200 words, which is too long! You do not have enough time in the exam for that, and it also tells the examiner that you are not able to summarise.

[ 3]: Write two short paragraphs of about 100 words in total. Ignore the “never” and “daily” categories for now. We can write a short statement about them later (they’re similar and not that significant).

Post below.

 

[hardyweineberg]

The [ 1] table chart illustrates how many times the percentages of Americans who went to fast food restaurants in the years 2003, 2006, and 2013, in terms of six frequency categories ranging from daily to never.

Overall, [ 2] it is clear that most Americans those who ate at fast food restaurants once a week, or once or two times a month were the highest two categories. Also, there was little change in most categories over those years. while the proportion of Americans who visited these restaurants once or twice a month and the percentage who visited a few times a year both increased over the given period, the figures for the other categories fell.
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[ 1]: A table is just a grid with numbers (and/or text).

[ 2]: Cut out padding/waffle. You wrote over 200 words, which is too long! You do not have enough time in the exam for that, and it also tells the examiner that you are not able to summarise.

[ 3]: Write two short paragraphs of about 100 words in total. Ignore the “never” and “daily” categories for now. We can write a short statement about them later (they’re similar and not that significant).

Post below.

The percentage who visited fast food restaurants weekly was the highest in 2003, at around 31%, marginally more than the proportion who visited once or twice a month, at 30%. This gap increased in 2006, but by 2013, the figure for "once or twice a month" had risen considerably to approximately 33% from 25%, surpassing the figure for "once a week", which had dropped to roughly 28%.

Additionally, those who went several times a week decreased negligibly from 17% in 2003 to 16% in 2013, while those who went a few times a year grew slightly from 13% to 15% over the same period.

 

[teechar]

The percentages of those who visited fast food restaurants weekly and those who went once or twice a month was were the highest in 2003, at around 31%. , marginally more than the proportion who visited once or twice a month, at 30%. This gap increased in 2006, but by 2013, the figure for "once or twice a month" latter group had risen considerably to approximately 33% from 25%, surpassing the figure for "once a week", the former which had dropped to roughly 28%.

Additionally, those who went several times a week decreased negligibly rose initially from 17% in 2003 to 20% three years later, but fell back to 16% in 2013, while those who went a few times a year grew slightly from 13% to 15% by 2003 and was still at that level in the final year. over the same period.
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Now, write one short sentence to cover the remaining two categories.

 

[hardyweineberg]

The share who went daily and those who never went were 5% or less in those three years.

 

[teechar]

Finally, the percentages of people share who went daily and those who never went were 5% or less in those three years.