[General] thus V-ing

[maoyueh]

Please let me know whether my sentence below is correct.

"When we read newspapers or watch TV news broadcasts every day, we often see heartrending scenes of the accidents, which often cause permanent injuries or even death, thus inflicting great pain on the victims’ family members."

My question us whether "thus V-ing" can be preceded by a dependent clause "which...." Thank you so much.

 

[Raymott]

You'd have to write "... permanent injuries or even death, which inflict great pain ..."
In fact, you should. Your original is not a good sentence. You're trying to put too much into one sentence.

"When we read newspapers or watch TV news, every day we see heart-rending scenes of accidents which cause permanent injuries or even death. These injuries inflict great pain on the victims' families." That's one improvement. Naturally, there are others.
You could leave out the two 'often's. There are too many time adverbials.

 

[TheParser]

***** NOT A TEACHER *****


Hello, Maoyueh:

If you wish to use thus + -ing, you may have to use two sentences. Maybe something like:

"When we watch the news, we often see scenes of horrifying accidents. Such tragedies frequently involve serious injuries or even death, thus inflicting great pain on the victims' families, too."