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Plastic surgery: a way to promote beauty or destroy it. State your position with examples.

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Surgery is one of the prominent inventions in medical science. It enables to cover the body's weakness and promote the look of the physique which ruined in a tragedy, accident, or a defect by birth. However, many people have done surgery just to enhance their natural beauty. I believe plastic surgery diminishes natural beauty rather than promoting it.
 

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Plastic surgery: a way to promote beauty or destroy it. State your position with examples.

Introduction:
Plastic surgery is one of the prominent [STRIKE]inventions[/STRIKE] fields in medical science. It [STRIKE]enables[/STRIKE] helps to [STRIKE]cover the body's weakness[/STRIKE] correct some appearance abnormalities and restore [STRIKE]promote the look of the physique[/STRIKE] a person's look which might have been ruined in a tragedy or an accident, or was a defect [STRIKE]by[/STRIKE] at birth. However, many people [STRIKE]have done[/STRIKE] undergo surgery just to enhance their natural appearance because they believe that will make them more beautiful. I believe plastic surgery diminishes natural beauty rather than promoting it.
Okay, now list (in point form) why you've taken that position.
 

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1. It costs a lot of money.
2. Plastic surgery has side effects too.
3. Sometime people are not satisfied after surgery.
 

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1. It costs a lot of money.
2. Plastic surgery has side effects too.
3. Sometime people are not satisfied after surgery.

Great! Now use each of those as the topic sentence of a body paragraph.
 

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1. It costs a lot of money. Plastic surgery is very expensive especially for middle class people. Moreover, this artificial beauty is not everlasting. It is a critical idea to put oneself in debt just to enhance the physical appearance for some time. Later, people suffer from the consequences of
the debt and fading of the beauty.


2. Plastic surgery has side effects too. Many people have painful experiences of the side effects of plastic surgery such as nerve damage, infection, and sometime even organ damage. Every part of the body is equally important rather than outer shape and figure. It is ridiculous to put other body parts in the risk merely to look more beautiful.

3. Sometime people are not satisfied after surgery. In several cases, the person who undergoes surgery did not get the expected results. On the one hand, a person lost his natural beauty, the other hand, he did not receive the desired one. He loses from both sides. Therefore, surgery does not only take their money, but peace of mind also.
 

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1. It costs a lot of money. Plastic surgery is very expensive especially for middle class people. Moreover, this artificial beauty is not everlasting. It is a critical idea to put oneself in debt just to enhance the physical appearance for some time. Later, people suffer from the consequences of
the debt and fading of the beauty.


2. Plastic surgery has side effects too. Many people have painful experiences of the side effects of plastic surgery such as nerve damage, infection, and sometime even organ damage. Every part of the body is equally important rather than outer shape and figure. It is ridiculous to put other body parts in the risk merely to look more beautiful.

3. Sometime people are not satisfied after surgery. In several cases, the person who undergoes surgery did not get the expected results. On the one hand, a person lost his natural beauty, the other hand, he did not receive the desired one. He loses from both sides. Therefore, surgery does not only take their money, but peace of mind also.

That's not a bad effort at all. Try to fix the parts I've highlighted, and post those paragraphs again.
 

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1. It costs a lot of money. Plastic surgery is very expensive especially for the middle class people. Moreover, this artificial beauty is not everlasting. It is an aweful idea to put oneself in debt just to enhance the physical appearance for some time. Later, people suffer from the consequences of the debt and fading of the beauty.


2. Plastic surgery has side effects too. Many people have painful experiences of the side effects of plastic surgery such as nerve damage, infection, and sometime even organ damage. Every part of the body is equally important and should take care as the look and figure. It is ridiculous to put other body parts in trouble merely to look more beautiful.

3. Sometime people are not satisfied with the result of the surgery. In numerous cases, the person who undergoes surgery does not get the expected results. On the one hand, a person has lost the natural beauty, on the other hand, the current look is not convincing. He loses both sides. Therefore, surgery does not take only their money, but peace of mind also.
 

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1. [STRIKE]It[/STRIKE] Plastic surgery usually costs a lot of money. [STRIKE]Plastic surgery[/STRIKE] It is very expensive especially for average-income earners. [STRIKE]the middle class people.[/STRIKE] Moreover, this artificial beauty is not everlasting and often requires further procedures, which just compounds the expense. It is an awful idea to put oneself in debt just to enhance [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] one's physical appearance for some time. Later, people suffer from the consequences of the debt and the fading of the "beauty."

2. Plastic surgery has side effects too. Many people [STRIKE]have painful experiences of the side effects of plastic surgery such as[/STRIKE] experience severe pain as a result of nerve damage, infection, and sometimes even organ damage. Every part of the body is equally important, and we should take care of our overall health, not just our looks. [STRIKE]as the look and figure.[/STRIKE] It is ridiculous to put other body parts [STRIKE]in trouble[/STRIKE] at risk merely to look more beautiful.

3. [STRIKE]Sometime[/STRIKE] Often, people are not satisfied with the result of the surgery. In numerous cases, the person who undergoes surgery does not get the expected results. On the one hand, a person has lost their natural beauty, and on the other hand, their new [STRIKE]current[/STRIKE] look is not convincing. This is really a lose-lose outcome. [STRIKE]He loses both sides.[/STRIKE] Therefore, surgery does not take only their money, but peace of mind also.

Okay, now you need to use some transition words at the start of those paragraphs to link them. You can also do the conclusion. Post all that below, and please pay attention to your spelling and punctuation.
 

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Plastic surgery usually costs a lot of money. It is very expensive especially for average-earning people. Moreover, this artificial beauty is not everlasting and often requires further procedure, which just compounds more expense. It is an awful idea to put oneself in debt just to enhance one's physical appearance for some time. Later, people suffer from the consequences of the debt and the fading of the"beauty".


In addition, Plastic surgery has side effects too. Many people experiences severe painas a result of nerve damage, infection, and sometimes even organ damage. Every part of the body is equally important, and we should take care of our overall health not just our looks. It is ridiculous to put other body parts at risk merely to look more beautiful.


Furthermore, Often people are not satisfied with the result of surgery. In numerous cases, the person who undergoes surgery does not get the expected results. On the one hand, a person has lost his natural beauty, and on the other hand, their new look is not convincing. there is really a lose-lose outcomes. Therefore, surgery does not take only their money, but peace of mind also.


In conclusion, Plastic surgery might causes many critical consequences which may results serious organ damage. After spending lots of money, people may not get the desired look. It affected them economically and psychologically.
 

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Plastic surgery usually costs a lot of money. It is very expensive especially for average-earning people. Moreover, this artificial beauty is not everlasting and often requires further procedures, which just compounds [STRIKE]more[/STRIKE] the expense. It is an awful idea to put oneself in debt just to enhance one's physical appearance for some time. Later, people suffer from the consequences of the debt and the fading of the"beauty".

[STRIKE]In addition,[/STRIKE] Firstly, plastic surgery has side effects. [STRIKE]too.[/STRIKE] Many people experience severe pains a result of nerve damage, infection, and sometimes even organ damage. Every part of the body is equally important, and we should take care of our overall health, not just our looks. It is ridiculous to put other body parts at risk merely to look more beautiful.

Furthermore, [STRIKE]Often[/STRIKE] people are often not satisfied with the result of surgery. In numerous cases, the person who undergoes surgery does not get the expected results. On the one hand, that person has lost his/her natural beauty, and on the other hand, their new look is not convincing. [STRIKE]there[/STRIKE] This is really a lose-lose outcome. Therefore, surgery does not only take [STRIKE]only[/STRIKE] their money, but peace of mind also.

In conclusion, plastic surgery [STRIKE]might causes many critical[/STRIKE] may well lead to several negative consequences which may result in serious damage to one's health. [STRIKE]organ damage.[/STRIKE] Also, after spending [STRIKE]lots of[/STRIKE] much money, people may not get the desired look. [STRIKE]It affected them[/STRIKE] Thus, plastic surgery can cost people both economically and psychologically.
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