Which type of essay to use ( Marine Biology)

[emsr2d2]

I have goals. Please let me know how this sounds.

I want/plan to Up grade upgrade English, Math, Biology and Chemistry to grade 12, through the ACE program at St Clair. From there, I'll do pre-health at St Clair and then go on to Laboratory Sciences at college. (I still don't know what you mean by "upgrade + name of subject".)

Halfway through (halfway through what?) with good marks It’ll will allow me to transfer to Laboratory Sciences at the University of Windsor and then to Marine Biology, Mid Reef Doctorate at the University of Australia.

So it will be St Clair college in Windsor, to Laboratory Sciences, mid through with good grades (I don't understand the underlined part at all) to Laboratory Sciences at the University of Windsor, and on to the University of Australia. I'll be back on Monday to follow up!

I'm really not sure you're taking much notice of our advice in our responses. You said in your first post that one of your problems is that you ramble and you're hard to follow - unfortunately, that is still the case. You must write in complete sentences! Do you understand what that means?

You're very inconsistent with your use of capitalisation and your use of full words. In one post, you used "laboratory sciences", "Laboratory Sciences" and "Lab sciences".

As you can see above, there are at least three parts of your post that I can't work out at all. Bear in mind that if you're planning to study for a degree, you're going to be doing a lot of writing and it must be comprehensible.

 

[Dr BlueThumb]

I'm really not sure you're taking much notice of our advice in our responses. You said in your first post that one of your problems is that you ramble and you're hard to follow - unfortunately, that is still the case. You must write in complete sentences! Do you understand what that means?

You're very inconsistent with your use of capitalisation and your use of full words. In one post, you used "laboratory sciences", "Laboratory Sciences" and "Lab sciences".

As you can see above, there are at least three parts of your post that I can't work out at all. Bear in mind that if you're planning to study for a degree, you're going to be doing a lot of writing and it must be comprehensible.

Understood, I’m sorry it appears that way. Be back to properly adjust the sentences another time. I know what Im doing trust me, I’m a very well spoken and polite person that understands my self much better then other people. I know how to teach myself and I also know and teach myself how I learn! Do you get that? Once you receive a degree in Marine Bio, in which the well planned out theory of mine, 10 successful coral reef systems, propagated corals, proven theories turned to facts and the acknowledgement of myself by a professor in mid reef marine bio saying He does the exact same things as I do is a confidence booster. So long story short. English is a piece of pie, it’s my last herdle, you try missing over 10 of 12 years of grade/high School and see if you can even remotely come close to what I have achieved. Teach the way I learn or please don’t respond, respectfully speaking or spoken, lol, it’s called what ever. You could learn a lot from me if in fact you truly care? Anyways God bless, sorry to be snippy I’m just trying to forgive the system for sacrifice me for the others. No child left behind, lm?ao.

I lvoe to be asmowee and rpscteeed, peace. MemyselfandHeHimselfandHimequalasymbioticrelationshiponeinwhichbemefitseachother. Got it!? Place the “I” next to self, comprehendo pie favor. Asperger’s, dyslexia, really is so special when a person dedicates years to improving one’s self. It’s a processing issue that is all my processor is better, just not designed for this secular liberal cartoon Mickey mouse kingdom.

 

[Tdol]

Thank you!

I studied Marine Biology for ten years and believe I was never taken seriously until after I proved my theories with write ups along with images after the successful system, or theory was implemented using for example: biological filtration, lower light and increased feedings and propagated corals just to name a few examples, even then I was still not taken seriously.

Do you think that no matter how correct I was, or in my opinion was correct, with solid proof, that my use of the English writing took all the wind out of my sails?

Did you try having your English checked before submission?

 

[emsr2d2]

Understood. I’m sorry it appears that way.

I'll be back to properly adjust the sentences another time.

I know what I'm doing, trust me.

I’m a very well-spoken and polite person that and I understand myself much better then than other people.

I know how to teach myself and I also know and teach myself know best how I learn!

Do you get that?

Once you receive a degree in Marine Bio, in which the well planned out theory of mine, 10 successful coral reef systems, propagated corals, proven theories turned to facts and the acknowledgement of myself by a professor in mid reef marine bio saying He does the exact same things as I do is a confidence booster. This entire underlined section is incomprehensible.

So To cut a long story short, English is a just one piece of the pie; it’s my last herdle hurdle.

You try missing over 10 of 12 years of grade/high school and see if you can even remotely come close to what I have achieved.

With respect, teach the way I learn or please don’t respond. respectfully speaking or spoken, lol, it’s called what ever.

You could learn a lot from me if, in fact, you truly care.

Anyways, God bless, sorry to be snippy.

I’m just trying to forgive the system for sacrifice me for the others. I don't know what this sentence means.

No child left behind, lm?ao. I don't know what the underlined part means.

I lvoe to be asmowee and rpscteeed, peace. The underlined are not English words.

MemyselfandHeHimselfandHimequalasymbioticrelationshiponeinwhichbemefitseachother. I have no idea what this long string of letters/words is supposed to mean.

Got it?

Place the “I” next to self, comprehendo pie favor. I don't know what this sentence means (the three words at the end look as if they're meant to be Spanish but they're not).

Asperger’s and dyslexia no comma here really is are so very special when a person dedicates years to improving one’s self. I don't understand the underlined part.

It’s a processing issue - that is, all my processor is better (better than what?), just not designed for this secular liberal cartoon Mickey Mouse kingdom.

I have made all the necessary corrections above to make your piece as grammatical and as comprehensible as I can. As you can see, there are parts that I just can't unravel.
I think the salient part of your post is "Teach the way I learn or please don't respond". I don't know how you learn. No one on this forum knows that. You have come to an English forum and said that you want to improve your English with a view to getting a degree. We are doing what we can to help with your English. I'm not sure that online help is really what you need. I think perhaps you should look into getting an English tutor, who specialises in your particular learning needs/style.

 

[Dr BlueThumb]

I have made all the necessary corrections above to make your piece as grammatical and as comprehensible as I can. As you can see, there are parts that I just can't unravel.
I think the salient part of your post is "Teach the way I learn or please don't respond". I don't know how you learn. No one on this forum knows that. You have come to an English forum and said that you want to improve your English with a view to getting a degree. We are doing what we can to help with your English. I'm not sure that online help is really what you need. I think perhaps you should look into getting an English tutor, who specialises in your particular learning needs/style.

That cost money. Which I can only afford several hrs a month so I need to do it mostly myself. I’m going to put more thought into my post and follow up. Just found out that lab science to marine bio is a possibility. I have 2 thick books on how to write/grammar then will buy a scientific writing book. Going to do the best that I can and come back in a few months. Will spend say 120 hrs reading and taking notes from these three books. In the mean time I’m going to focus on hand writing my sentences then adding to google docs and edit the draft. Then post on here and follow up. Anyway you can be my editor on my google doc or post the link here? Also, I’ll take a pic soon on the table of contents and send it here to see if the teachers here can verify it’s a complete combo of books that covers all areas of writing. Once again I need to forgive the system and know or at least hope, when I go to school they’ll understood Asperger’s more then in 1985, I’ll be required to have a doctors note. This gives me extra time on work and tests and behaviour leanience perhaps

 

[Tarheel]

Try:

That costs money, and I don't have that much to spare.

Those stream of consciousness posts can be very hard to read. The sentences aren't connected to each other in any meaningful way. They are just random thoughts.

Keep in mind that you don't need to say everything that comes to mind, and there are many things you shouldn't bother to say at all. For example, it's fine to have goals, but everybody has goals, so saying you have goals is not making a meaningful statement. My point is that you should leave out things that don't help you make your point.

If you would make your sentences shorter and simpler it would be easier for me to understand you.

There is an advantage that writing has over speaking. You can read what you have written and make changes before you post it.

You have problems with punctuation and capitalization. Those are two things to work on.

 

[emsr2d2]

That costs money. Which I can only afford several hrs hours a month so I need to do it mostly myself. I’m going to put more thought into my post and follow up. I just found out that Lab Science to Marine Bio is a possibility. I have 2 two thick books on how to write/grammar then will and soon/later I will buy a scientific writing book.

I'm going to do the best that I can and come back in a few months. I will spend, say, 120 hrs reading and taking notes from these three books. In the meantime, I’m going to focus on hand writing my sentences then adding them to Google Docs and edit the draft.

Then I will post on here and follow up.

Anyway, can you can be my editor on my Google Doc or should I post the link here?

Also, I’ll take a picture soon on of the table of contents and send post it here to see if the teachers here can verify that it’s a complete combo of books that covers all areas of writing.

Once again, I need to forgive the system and know, or at least hope, that when I go to school they’ll understood understand Asperger’s more then than in 1985. I’ll be required to have a doctor's note. This gives me extra time on for work and tests, and perhaps they'll be lenient when dealing with my behaviour. leanience perhaps

I have made the necessary corrections above. I think it's a good idea to take some time out to really study English before you try to write more complicated pieces.
One thing you definitely need to work on is the difference between "then" and "than".

 

[Dr BlueThumb]

Try:

That costs money, and I don't have that much to spare.

Those stream of consciousness posts can be very hard to read. The sentences aren't connected to each other in any meaningful way. They are just random thoughts.

Keep in mind that you don't need to say everything that comes to mind, and there are many things you shouldn't bother to say at all. For example, it's fine to have goals, but everybody has goals, so saying you have goals is not making a meaningful statement. My point is that you should leave out things that don't help you make your point.

If you would make your sentences shorter and simpler it would be easier for me to understand you.

There is an advantage that writing has over speaking. You can read what you have written and make changes before you post it.

You have problems with punctuation and capitalization. Those are two things to work on.

Thank you, very much!

I knew I had, and still have, Asperger’s. But, I’m assuming Dyslexia as well.

I see it pops it’s head out at times when I am tired, If so this is fantastic news to me!

This could be great news because Dyslexics excel in different areas same as people with Asperger’s, once conquered or managed, it can be an exceptional asset.

In my opinion, I just have to work harder in some areas while diagram, quotes, short writings, I can memorize. Only through repetition, then my brain acts like file cabinet or an image with text such as a que card, I can retrieve it at will.

Writing on the other hand will take a year, then pre-health a year, laboratory Science’s four years, and Marine Biology, Three years.

I included pictures of the beginning of what I’m going to be self studying. Then of course upgrade grade 10 basic English to 12 University level, same with bio, Chem, math.

Once I can I apologize for the random topics in this post. Please bare with me a little longer. Just a little stressed, because I’ve been organizing my goals since before Christmas and now today I see the light at the end of the tunnel, career wise and on a side note I have short and long term goals, intentions and habits too.

I shortened my sentences a little, I’ll try harder next time! Thanks again

 

[Dr BlueThumb]

Be honest with me please teachers, do you see a little hope?

 

[emsr2d2]

Based on post #28, I would say there is definitely hope. That post was well-written and contained very few errors. It was well laid out and didn't ramble. It's certainly helpful for you to have realised that being tired has a detrimental effect on your writing.

 

[jutfrank]

Your posts have gotten better over the course of this thread. Post #25 was quite well written and post #28 even more so. Well done. There is hope!

 

[Dr BlueThumb]

Based on post #28, I would say there is definitely hope. That post was well-written and contained very few errors. It was well laid out and didn't ramble. It's certainly helpful for you to have realised that being tired has a detrimental effect on your writing.

You are right. I’ve walked and rode my bike in the last week, for around 30 hours. I’m almost at the point by the end of the month to be well organized and registered in school. Then I can put my main focus on my English.

 

[Dr BlueThumb]

Thank you, scholars! I really needed that.

Ten years from now, I plan to be diving the Great Barrier Reef as a career.

I need to humble myself now and learn to not need to boast or get offended at nay sayers, thanks thou to them because they really pushed me to prove them wrong. Now, I just need to be content.

My plan is to have the text books a year prior and read it a few times, then take notes. This way, I can focus while at school on other things too, and not be frustrated or feel like I will not make the strict grades required to go from College to the University Level in laboratory sciences.

 

[Tarheel]

I didn't know there were careers to be made diving the Great Barrier Reef. (Something to do with marine biology maybe?)

I think you mean you need to learn not to boast. (I could be wrong.)

You can be offended by something or you can take offense at something.

I don't think you want to be content. Contentment clashes with ambition.

A year prior to what?

I don't know how you go from college to the university level.

 

[emsr2d2]

I didn't know there were careers to be made diving the Great Barrier Reef. (Something to do with marine biology maybe?)

@Tarheel - have you read the entire thread? Almost all of the OP's posts have mentioned his/her plan to study Marine Biology in the future.

 

[Tarheel]

@Tarheel - have you read the entire thread? Almost all of the OP's posts have mentioned his/her plan to study Marine Biology in the future.

@Tarheel - have you read the entire thread? Almost all of the OP's posts have mentioned his/her plan to study Marine Biology in the future.

Yes. That's why I mentioned marine biology.

 

[emsr2d2]

Yes. That's why I mentioned marine biology.

The way it was worded made it sound as if you were just guessing.

 

[Dr BlueThumb]

April is going to be a good month because I have a lot of freed up time to focus on English being my number one focus. Also I have over 20 other subjects and sub subjects. I’ll be writing about Love, Marine Biology and Christianity mostly if that’s ok to write about Christianity?

Back later to respond to the suggestions and correct what was done wrong from me, based on the teachers suggestions on the last post I made. And to respond to the questions.

Much Love, Clintos, the “os” stands for operating system, laugh out loud. Clint is my real name, Paul my middle one, and my last name is Johnson, from Windsor, Ontario,Canada. 43 years old, male.

Oh yeah, I received as a gift a book on Christianity oriented poems, around 140 years old in mint condition. I would like to get into poetry and write books one day around 10 years from now, so that style of poetry seems perfect. Here’s my first poem: Corals, Corals, Corals, they’re as fascinating as candle lights, by Clint Paul Johnson, also know as Dr BlueThumb and Phyto4Life.

 

[emsr2d2]

April is going to be a good month because I have a lot of freed-up time to focus on English. being my number one focus. Also, I have over 20 other subjects and sub subjects. I’ll be writing about love, Marine Biology and Christianity mostly. if that’s Is it okay/OK to write about Christianity?

I'll come back later to respond to the suggestions and correct what was done wrong from me I got wrong, based on the teachers' suggestions on the last post I made no full stop here and to respond to the questions.

Much love, Clintos. (The “os” stands for operating system, laugh out loud LOL.) Clint is my real name, [removed personal info] my middle one, and my last name is [removed personal info], and I'm from Windsor, Ontario, space here Canada. I'm 43 years old and male.

Oh yeah By the way, I received, as a gift, a book on of Christianity-oriented poems; it's around 140 years old and in mint condition. I would like to get into poetry and write books one day (around 10 years from now), so that style of poetry seems perfect. Here’s my first poem:

Corals, Corals, Corals,
they’re as fascinating as candle lights.

By [removed personal info], also know as Dr BlueThumb and Phyto4Life.

Please note my corrections above. I have removed your middle and last names. This is a public forum so we discourage users from giving out information that less-than-honest people could use for nefarious means. This post alone would have given away your full name, your year of birth and your location.

With regard to writing about Christianity, I will give a tentative yes. As long as you are writing simply for practice, and accept that we will still correct errors, it should be fine. If at any point, we think that a post is veering into the realm of sermonising or sounds evangelical, we might have to delete it. Remember that we have users from all over the world, of many different religions (or no religion).

If you want to post poetry for us to look at, remember to post it in the Poetry sub-forum.

 

[Tarheel]

Say:

April is going to be a good month because I will have a lot of time to focus on English.

Try:

There's quite a bit that I want to talk about.

The word "love" is not a proper noun. Also, "marine biology" is not capitalized except perhaps as a course for study in a college curriculum.

Say:

also known as