Writing several sequential results

[marcofabri]

Hi,

I am writing several sequential results and that was the best I thought. Please, it sounds clear? Is the position of the word "respectively" in the last sentence correct?


Thanks

Compared to AL18, CR18 rats had ~10% lower fasting glucose, ~15% lower OGTT, ~28% lower IpTT, ~21% lower resting metabolic rate, ~13% lower blood pressure, ~16% lower heart rate, ~62% lower triglycerides, ~76% lower cholesterol, ~66% lower VLDL-cholesterol, ~38% and ~46% lower atherogenic and cardiovascular risk indexes, respectively. AL18 and CR18 groups showed similar HDL and LDL-cholesterol levels. CR18 group also presented an anti-inflammatory profile compared to the AL18 group. Compared to AL18, CR18 rats had ~18% and ~40% lower IL-6 and TNF-α serum levels, respectively, and 17% higher IL-10 levels. Moreover, the IL-6/IL10 and TNF-α ratios were respectively ~24% and ~31% lower in CR18 rats than in AL18 rats.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

Hi,

I am writing several sequential results, and this is the best I can do. Is it clear? Is the position of the word "respectively" in the last sentence correct?

Yes, you placed using "respectively" correctly, but it wanted some commas.

Thanks.

Compared to AL18, CR18 rats had ~10% lower fasting glucose, ~15% lower OGTT, ~28% lower IpTT, ~21% lower resting metabolic rate, ~13% lower blood pressure, ~16% lower heart rate, ~62% lower triglycerides, ~76% lower cholesterol, ~66% lower VLDL-cholesterol, ~38% and ~46% lower atherogenic and cardiovascular risk indexes, respectively. AL18 and CR18 groups showed similar HDL and LDL-cholesterol levels. CR18 group also presented an anti-inflammatory profile compared to the AL18 group. Compared to AL18, CR18 rats had ~18% and ~40% lower IL-6 and TNF-α serum levels, respectively, and 17% higher IL-10 levels. Moreover, the IL-6/IL10 and TNF-α ratios were, respectively, ~24% and ~31% lower in CR18 rats than in AL18 rats.

I'm assuming that the ~ symbol means something.

 

[marcofabri]

Hi Charlie,

I used the ~ symbol instead of writing approximately. Do you think it is not correct?

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

Hi Charlie,

I used the ~ symbol instead of writing approximately. Do you think it is not correct?

It depends on who your readers are. If they know what it means, it's fine. If you're writing for the general public (people like me, for example), it might help to to spell it out.

 

[jutfrank]

This is definitely not for the general public. It's a write-up of research data.

Which section of your paper is this supposed to be in, Marco?

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

This is definitely not for the general public. It's a write-up of research data. . . .

In that case, tildes are fine.

 

[tedmc]

For a scientific report, I think figures are best presented in table form rather than a paragraph, for easy reading and comparison.

 

[jutfrank]

For a scientific report, I think figures are best presented in table form rather than a paragraph, for easy reading and comparison.

This is exactly what I'm thinking, but there may be some justification for attempting to relate the figures in prose form. It depends to some extent on the level and type of discourse (i.e., basically, how this passage is related to the wider text).

 

[marcofabri]

Hi jutfrank,


This text is from the results session of my manuscript.

 

[Tdol]

Is there a case for using a semicolon as a separator?