Sentence Check

[silverwolf801]

Is anything wrong grammatically with these sentences. I really need to know.

1. The reason why I should be a Moderator is because well I have been in the cb for approximately 3 years now and well ever since that time I have been very active and I have tried my utmost best to do every thing I ever could for the cb and I will also take that approach toward the Bleach World section
I know that I have a lot of competition to get this spot and I also know that the chances of me getting this spot are very slim but I will treat this like an interview to a job and say yes I know that I can beat every single person for this spot because I know that I am better than all of them when it comes down to being a
Moderator

Well I also know that in these 3 years here I have not been the quietest person here and i know that I have been in a couple of altercations but I really hope that none of those things effects how much I have been here for the cb. I hope that you really think of me with consideration.

2. Well I want to be Moderator of The Bleach World Section because I hang around there a lot. Such as the Bleach Manga section I am in there everyday chatting it up about if ichigo will die or not or if grimmjow is still alive(I know he is he had better be). Of course I am in the Bleach Fan Creations always. My threads in there hit a 1000 views which is pretty good when I see peoples opinions on what they see. I am also in the Bleach anime section to get my fix of Bleach anime and and to chat it up about what will probably happen next.

I have to tell the truth but I am never really in the Bleach Dubbed section because i don't watch the dubbed version of bleach and I have been in the Bleach General Talk section a couple of times but not a lot. But if I was to get this Mod position I would certainly make sure to go to all those sections and become active in each and every one of them.

Thanks for taking your time in reading my application.

[John007]

Originally Posted by silverwolf801

Is anything wrong grammatically with these sentences. I really need to know.

1. The reason why I think I should be a should be a Moderator is because well I have been in the cb for approximately 3 years now and well ever since that time I have been very active and I have tried my utmost best to do every thing I ever could for the cb and I will would also take that approach toward the Bleach World section.

I know that I have there is a lot of competition to get this spot and I also know that the chances of me getting this spot it are very slim but I will treat this like an interview to for a job and say yes that I know that I can beat every single other person for this spot because I know that I am better than all of them when it comes down to being a
Moderator.

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I took some time in correcting the grammar for you in order to help you along a bit,

The words that I have highlighted in Green are words that need to be deleted and the Red words are words that needed to be added in order for it to make sense.