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    Dear F., i know a lot of time had passed since our unexpected meeting on the airport in L. However, I am so wonder how are you and how your buisness trip went, that I have to decided to write. I really hope, you managed to arrive at the place without major problems or complications and all buisness that you had planned ended with a succes.
    In the end I just want to add that if you ever will need a guide or advice about Western European Countries, feel free to contact with me. I will be more than happy and with pleasure will try to provide you with valuable advices and informations.
    Look forward to hear from you,
    yours sincerely
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    please, help me to make it grammar correct and to get rid of so many "with" words

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    Default Re: please help me to correct my letter and make it more formal..

    Quote Originally Posted by annielle View Post
    Dear F., I know a lot of time had has passed since our unexpected meeting on at the airport in L. However, I am so was wondering how are you and how your buisness trip went,, that therefore (you could also use 'so' instead of therefore) I have to decided to write to you. I really hope, you have managed to arrive at the place without any major problems or complications and all buisness that you had planned ended with a succes.
    In the end I just want to add that if you will ever need a guide or advice about on Western European Countries, feel free to contact with me. I will be more than happy and with pleasure will try to provide you with valuable advices and informations.
    Looking forward to hearing from you,
    Yours sincerely
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    please, help me to make it grammar correct and to get rid of so many "with" words
    I am not a teacher

    You can't say advices with 's' . Advice is a uncountable noun and have no plural form.
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    Default Re: please help me to correct my letter and make it more formal..

    Quote Originally Posted by annielle View Post
    Dear F.,
    I know that a lot of time had has passed since our unexpected meeting on at the airport in L. However, I am so wondered how are you you are and how your buisness business trip went that and I have to decided to write to you. I really hope that you managed to arrive at the place without major problems or complications and all buisness business that you had planned ended with a succes in success.
    In the end I just want to add that if you ever will need a guide or advice about Western European countries, feel free to contact with me. I will be more than happy and, with pleasure, will try to provide you with valuable advices advice and informations.
    Looking forward to hearing from you,
    Yours sincerely,
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    please, help me to make it grammar correct and to get rid of so many "with" words
    Gil
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    Default Re: please help me to correct my letter and make it more formal..

    Quote Originally Posted by Gillnetter View Post
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    thank you very much!!!

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    Default Re: please help me to correct my letter and make it more formal..

    Quote Originally Posted by misiania View Post
    I am not a teacher

    You can't say advices with 's' . Advice is a uncountable noun and have no plural form.
    thanks a lot!!

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