moon does not have a face :)

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gauri_agr

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Hi,

Please correct the grammar below

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My four year daughter was reading a picture book. One of the page in the book, she noticed a moon having a smailing face. She shouted that this book is telling a lie as she never saw a real moon having an eye, nose and mouth. She further asked me if I was also agree with her.
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Gauri
 
Hi,

Please correct the grammar below

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My four-year-old daughter was reading ["looking at"/"leafing through" may be more appropriate, since you mention it to be "a picture book"] a picture book. In one of the pages in the book, she noticed a moon [STRIKE]having[/STRIKE] with a sm[STRIKE]a[/STRIKE]iling face. She shouted that this book is telling a lie as she never saw [STRIKE]a[/STRIKE] the [real - IMO, this could be left out, as there's only "one" moon we can see directly] moon having an eye, nose and mouth. She further asked me if I [STRIKE]was [/STRIKE]also agree with her.
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Gauri

See amendments above. Someone may find other options, or correct some of them.

charliedeut
 
thanks Charliedout for correction

Gauri
 
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