During her lifetime

[kuben123]

During her lifetime, Estee Lauder had achieved many successful ventures, many of which had a bumpy start. Nevertheless, it was her femininity and docile demeanor that gave her an edge over her ‘masculine ‘rivals!

Her dominance in a field that was initially dominated by the domineering male counterparts took years of patience and perseverance to break through. The best thing about this self-made "Cosmetic Czarina" was that she had a wealth of patience and an entire 'lexicon' of determinant plans, even when facing bitter resentments!

We should be pleasant to everyone, even to the ones that throw blunt accusations and harsh words at us. This will be good for business and personal relationships. This alone reflects ones artfulness in dealing with people!

Are there any errors?

 

[Tarheel]

During her lifetime, Estee Lauder [STRIKE]had[/STRIKE] achieved many successful ventures, many of which had a bumpy start. Nevertheless, it was her femininity and docile demeanor that gave her an edge over her masculine rivals.

You don't need "had" in the first clause. Simple past is best. Also, please note that I replaced the exclamation mark with a period (full stop).

Her dominance in a field that was initially dominated by men took years of patience and perseverance to achieve. The best thing about this self-made "Cosmetic Czarina" was that she had a wealth of patience and was very determined, even when facing bitter opposition.

You have gotten into the habit of using an exclamation mark every other sentence. They should be used much more sparingly than that.

We should be pleasant to everyone, even those who throw blunt accusations and harsh words at us. This will be good for business and personal relationships. This alone reflects one's artfulness in dealing with people.

 

[kuben123]

Thank you.

 

[emsr2d2]

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