But that has absolutely nothing to do with the use of city parkland!
Not all essay questions ask you to write a balanced response. It's only when the questions says something like "discuss both sides" that you have to do that. For the essay question above, you are asked "to what extent do you agree", which means you need to agree, disagree, or partially agree.
Yes, that is understandable. Often, a balanced essay is easier to put together.Thank you. @teechar
If I was asked to write an opinion essay, I would find it easyfor meto write a balancedresponse in which I can write a250 word essay.
But sometimes the choice is so clear that it is not difficult to come up with ideas and examples.Taking a position can be a bit difficult to write four or five arguments supporting one position. I feel somehow I am running out of ideas and words.
That makes sense, simply because you have more points to support this position.For now. I disagree with the statement below. Iwould rather takesupport preserving public parksposition overand not using them for residential areas.
Take a look at my replies in the links below.My major problems are the organization of the paragraph and writing better introduction and thesis statement since you mentioned that the essay I wrote was not clear.
Thank you so much. I hope you find the paragraphsgood.acceptable. Idon'tdidn’t add my own opinion since it isn't an opinion essay. I justwritewrote a sentence to summarize each paragraph. I look forward to your comments and corrections.will be taken into consideration
I don't understand why you did that! What connects all those points? Remember that a body paragraph needs to have one uniting theme. I suggested the environment as one possible theme for your first body paragraph, but of course, it doesn't have to be about that. You can choose another theme if you wish. However, I can't see what theme unites those four points above. I suggest you go back to the drawing board again and try to reorganize your ideas for the body paragraphs. Take a look at the ideas from the following websites and choose five or six of the ones you think are the best. List them in brief point form below. Do not write sentences for now; just write about five of the best benefits of urban parkland.In the following paragraph, I mentioned four points
1. Urban parkland is good place for family and friends
2. They provide facilities and equipment.
3. Climate change
4 Their benefits to economic.
I don't understand why you did that! What connects all those points? Remember that a body paragraph needs to have one uniting theme. I suggested the environment as one possible theme for your first body paragraph, but of course, it doesn't have to be about that. You can choose another theme if you wish. However, I can't see what theme unites those four points above. I suggest you go back to the drawing board again and try to reorganize your ideas for the body paragraphs. Take a look at the ideas from the following websites and choose five or six of the ones you think are the best. List them in brief point form below. Do not write sentences for now; just write about five of the best benefits of urban parkland.
Why City Parks Matter - Powerful Tools for Cities | City Parks Alliance
City parks provide access to recreational opportunities, increase property values, spur local economies, combat crime, and help protect the environment.cityparksalliance.orgSix reasons to nurture urban parks
This blog post addresses 6 benefits that urban parks provide to the environment, the economy, the public health, and the social interactions.blogs.iadb.org
In order of what? However, I think you now understand what a body paragraph means.all points were written in order.
Yes!Do you mean by one uniting theme is one idea for the entire paragraph?
Yes! That would be a good topic sentence (for a paragraph about health).For example: the topic sentence is (City parks offer individual people several health benefits)
Yes, if you want to write an entire paragraph only about public health.I should write one idea for the topic sentence
the idea is City parks are essential for public health. No other points should be mentioned
Very good. Now, try to sort those into two groups, and give each group a theme. Do not write sentences for now. Just put the points above into two groups.In regard to your question, here are five points
1. Reduction of the Urban Heat Island Effect.
2. Mental Health Boost.
3. A Place for Physical Activity.
4. Clean Air.
5. Incentive socialization.
Thank you sir @teechar for your patience.In order of what? However, I think you now understand what a body paragraph means.
Yes!
Yes! That would be a good topic sentence (for a paragraph about health).
Yes, if you want to write an entire paragraph only about public health.
Very good. Now, try to sort those into two groups, and give each group a theme. Do not write sentences for now. Just put the points above into two groups.
Right, and if you want, you can mention that they represent important habitats for certain species.First group
Public parks have key advantages on environment
Clean Air.
Reduction of the Urban Heat Island Effect.
Good.Second group
Public parks have direct benefits on public health
Mental Health Boost.
Place for Physical Activity.
Incentive socialization.
Yes, that fits in the second body paragraph.(being social results in reducing stress and improving communication skills, etc. ( I guess it is suitable under this theme)
Right, and if you want, you can mention that they represent important habitats for certain species.
Good.
Yes, that fits in the second body paragraph.
Now, go ahead and write those two body paragraphs. Write in a clear and straightforward manner (do not complicate your phrasing unnecessarily), and try to give actual examples if you can.
There's no need to be sorry. Learning takes time.Thank you @teechar I am really sorry for taking up your time.
That can be the topic sentence for that body paragraph.Public parkshave key advantages onare essential for a healthy urban environment.
Do some research on the net. You can get more information that way.I wrote about clean air. I turned out that I couldn't write much about it.
Yes of course. That is what you should do. Write one body paragraph about all the environmental benefits of city parks.is it possible to include the (Reduction of the Urban Heat Island Effect.) With clean air in the same paragraph? It is one of the advantages of public parks on environment.
You're welcome.Thanks again.
There's no need to be sorry. Learning takes time.
That can be the topic sentence for that body paragraph.
Do some research on the net. You can get more information that way.
Yes of course. That is what you should do. Write one body paragraph about all the environmental benefits of city parks.
You're welcome.
[ 1] Public parks are essential for a healthy urban environment. [ 2]It goes without saying thatThe world has experienced agradualrecent increase in temperature and extreme heat waves that have resulted inheat-relatedan increase in illnesses and deaths.Plant urban trees and proliferation ofUrban parks and woodlandsforests remarkablycan lowerheattemperatures and cool city environments.buildings and cars.Not only do green spaces provide shade, but they also absorbwaste airpollutants and toxins. [ 3]Green spaces can reduce heat temperature and cool buildings and cars.Equally important, having green spaces createsbreathtakingpleasant sceneryofinthecitiesand neighborhood as well. Green space neighborhoodsand make them more attractive for people to live in and visit.This can increase the demand for accommodations.[ 4]In conclusion, I believe public parks have myriad benefits for the environment in reducing heat temperature as well as cooling the weather, and making the surroundings heaven-like paradise. The two key advantages of public parks are lower heat temperature and beautifully decorated neighborhoods and accommodations. [ 5] For example, Central Park in the middle of New York is a green oasis in a dense urban jungle. It helps in reducing the pollution level in that city and provides a habitat for many birds and animals.
[ 6] Moreover, public parks have direct benefitsonfor public health. [ 7]Mental health boosts when one is relaxing and doing sportsThey help people to relax and pracise various sports, and thiscan foster hisis beneficial for their mental and physical health.abilities. As a result, memory enhances retention and academic achievement improves. Many research have shown a strong correlation between park advantages and boosting mental health and cognitive ability.Unlike gyms, public parks are free of charge.YouPeople can do sports, walk and train using park equipment. They appeal to all ages. Furthermore,arecity parks offer a breathing spaceswhereyou meditate andoffice workers can go during their lunch break to relax.This can reduce blood pressure and make you more energetic. In addition, they build resilience to stress, anxiety, and depression.They are, in fact, the perfect places in whichyourfamily and friendspeople can get together, with family and friends, and have fun, during weekdays or over the weekend.
[ 8] In conclusion,Public[ 9] public parks providehealthseveral benefits such as improving people’s mental and physical health, [ 10]cognitive abilitiesand they providespaciousgreen spaces for exercising and relaxing.meditating.[ 11]Their advantages on humans are countless. They also help to reduce pollution levels and city temperatures.
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[ 1]: You wrote 304 words just for the two body paragraphs. That is too long! Also, I have no idea why you kept the topic sentences separate! They are not headings. They are part of the paragraph.
[ 2]: Avoid such meaningless cliches.
[ 3]: That is repetitive.
[ 4]: I have no idea what you did there! The conclusion is the last paragraph of the essay.
[ 5]: If you can give examples in your body paragraphs, you get better marks.
[ 6]: Use linking/transition words/phrases.
[ 7]: That is totally ungrammatical!
[ 8]: The conclusion should be a separate paragraph, at the end of your essay.
[ 9]: Do not capitalize words unnecessarily.
[ 10]: Do not introduce new ideas in the conclusion. You did not discuss cognitive abilities in your body paragraphs.
[ 11]: Do not write generic statements in the conclusion. The conclusion is supposed to be the most specific part of the essay. All you need is a sentence or two that summarize the main points/findings from the body paragraphs.
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Now, you just need to write the introduction. Do that, put the revised essay together, and post it below.
Thank you @teechar
I disagree. It asks you to which extent do you agree or disagree. That is asking for an opinion.This is a non-opinion essay.
You integrate your opinion into your arguments (in the body paragraphs), just as we did above.If it was an opinion essay, in which parts of the paragraph should I write my opinion?
Public parks are an important part of any city [ 1]price gift withand they offer countless benefits. They are created to serve individuals and the environment as well. [ 2]Public parks have two main benefits, Public parks are essential for a healthy urban environment and public parks have direct benefits for public health[ 3] However, some people argue that the large areas of land they occupy could be used for residential or commercial expansion. [ 4] I disagree with that.
See correction above.Is the general statement. Is itacceptable?
See above.Are the backgroundsentences. Is itacceptable?
I have no idea what you are talking about! You DO NOT put paragraph titles in an IELTS essay. No titles!The title of the first paragraph.
The title of the second paragraph.
Yes, avoid that.Q1. Is it possible to write the pronoun "you". You omitted it twice. Should I avoid addressing the reader by using the pronoun (you)?
You can. Alternatively, you can use "a person".Q2. Can I substitute "individuals" for "people" and use it and "one" in a non-opinion essay? For example, "One should practice different sports because each has its benefits".
You can use "urban parks" or "city parks".Q3. Is it possible to use synonyms instead of repeating the public parks or pronoun (they)?
It's all done now. See above.Q4. Do you havean adviseany advice on how to improve the introduction and the entire essay?
[1] My apologies. I meant to say that the environment is a priceless gift that has countless benefits. I tried to use it as a general statement for the essay.---------------------------------------
[ 1]: I have no idea what "price gift" is supposed to mean. DO NOT make up new phrases, translate directly from another language, or complicate your phrasing unnecessarily. Otherwise, you risk getting a low score in the exam.
[ 2]: I have no idea why you wrote that or what it's supposed to do.
[ 3]: You need to present the issue of discussion to the reader.
[ 4]: You need to write your thesis at the end of the introduction.
I am running out of words. I can't thank you enough. Please forgive me for bothering you, sir.No! Please just put the essay together now, and do not make any new changes. Post it below.
No. The introduction should be general. Specifics belong in the conclusion.[3.4] I thought I should mention in details in the end of introduction, thesis statement, what I am going to write in body paragraphs' titles
No! Do not include titles in an essay.Q1Do I have to write the titles of body paragraph 1 and 2 in thesis statement?
When speaking in general terms, it is usual to use the plural. However, please do not make new changes! "by all means" can have a different meaning (unintended here).Q2 Which is best using singular or plural in writing when writing in body paragraph?
1-People should protect environment by all means.
2- A person/ one/ an individual should protect.
environment by all means.
You need to:Last question, In opinion essay, I can mention my opinion in the introduction specifically, in the thesis statement, body paragraph, and in conclusion. Right?