Back to 2005...(41 words)

[Silverobama]

The following short paragraph was written by me to express the idea that when in 2005, the technology wasn't as advanced as it is today. We used old-fashioned softwares to chat with friends online. But I do miss/love those good old days because it always brings back good memories betwee us when I think of it. Please help me to correct the following sentences:

Back to 2005, we didn't use WeChat * and we didn't have Wifi service either. But I really miss/love those good times/days chatting with each other online because it always brings back warm memories between me and my friends of that time.

*: WeChat is a kind of apps which became popular in recent 10 years.

I think the underlined word can be deleted. I don't know which word to choose. Also, Is the paragraph coeherent?

 

[Tarheel]

Two things. You can leave "service" out of " WiFi service". No "softwares",

 

[emsr2d2]

I wrote the following short paragraph [STRIKE]was written by me[/STRIKE] to express [STRIKE]the idea[/STRIKE] that, [STRIKE]when[/STRIKE] in 2005, [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] technology wasn't as advanced as it is today. We used old-fashioned [STRIKE]softwares[/STRIKE] software to chat with friends online. [STRIKE]But[/STRIKE] I [STRIKE]do[/STRIKE] miss/loved those good old days [STRIKE]because[/STRIKE] it always brings back good memories [STRIKE]between us[/STRIKE] when I think of it. Please help me to correct the following sentences:

Back [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] in 2005, we didn't have WiFi or use WeChat*. [STRIKE]and we didn't have Wifi service either.[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]But[/STRIKE] I really miss [STRIKE]/love those good times/days chatting[/STRIKE] the way we chatted with each other online in those days - [STRIKE]because[/STRIKE] it always brings back warm memories. [STRIKE]between me and my friends of that time.[/STRIKE]*: WeChat is [STRIKE]a kind of[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]apps[/STRIKE] an app [STRIKE]which[/STRIKE] that [STRIKE]became[/STRIKE] has become popular in [STRIKE]recent[/STRIKE] the last 10 years.

I think the underlined word can be deleted. I don't know which word to choose. Also, is the paragraph coherent?

See above. The main problem was the use of "because". You don't miss those days because thinking about those days brings back warm memories. That's almost tautologous. If you want to use "because" you need to give us actual concrete things about what it was like to chat in those days that you actually loved.

Also note that we weren't using "old-fashioned software" in 2005. In 2005, the software we were using was modern. It's only now that it is deemed old-fashioned.

 

[Silverobama]

See above. The main problem was the use of "because". You don't miss those days because thinking about those days brings back warm memories. That's almost tautologous. If you want to use "because" you need to give us actual concrete things about what it was like to chat in those days that you actually loved.

Also note that we weren't using "old-fashioned software" in 2005. In 2005, the software we were using was modern. It's only now that it is deemed old-fashioned.

Much appreciated, emsr2d2.

I think the first "loved" between "miss" and "those" should not be used in past tense. May I ask for you used "loved"?

I think the last sentence should be "WeChat is an app.....". Am I right?

Is it wrong to say "Back in 2005"?

I agree with all your comments and they're really helpful!

 

[teechar]

I think the first "loved" between "miss" and "those" should not be [STRIKE]used[/STRIKE] in the past tense. May I ask [STRIKE]for[/STRIKE] why you used "loved"?

Those days are over. You loved them then, but you miss them now.

I think the last sentence should be "WeChat is an app.....". Am I right?

And it is.

Is it wrong to say "Back in 2005"?

No, it is not wrong to say that.

 

[emsr2d2]

Is it wrong to say "Back in 2005"?

Why would I have changed your "Back to 2005" to "Back in 2005" if the latter was wrong?

 

[Silverobama]

Why would I have changed your "Back to 2005" to "Back in 2005" if the latter was wrong?

I was about to say that I should have said "Is "Back to 2005" wrong"? Yes, it is.

Much appreciated, emsr2d2!

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

I was about to say that I should have said, "Is 'Back to 2005' wrong?" Yes, it is.

Much appreciated, emsr2d2!

Hi, Silver!

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