Movie Collection

[Gaya87]

Hi, can someone please check the following sentences? Thank you.

[FONT=&quot]Short summary[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]A great collection of Superman movies namely Superman Doomsday, All-Star Superman and Superman vs the Elite in one thrilling set.

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[FONT=&quot]Long summary[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]An action-packed movies in one thrilling set! Follow the adventures of the DC Comics hero, Superman, as he meets his greatest challenge as a champion in Superman Doomsday. Next, in All-Star Superman, as a result of his arch nemesis Lex Luther's scheming, Superman is overexposed to radiation and is slowly dying. When catastrophe strikes, Superman once again rushes into action in Superman vs. The Elite.[/FONT]
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[MattR]

Not a teacher

First of all, I think it is a good idea to put the movie titles in quotes as this improves readability.

Your short summary is missing a verb, so it is not a complete sentence.

Take a closer look at the long summary: Right at the start, you wrote "an [...] movies". Furthermore, a verb is missing here. Finally, be very cautious when to use exclamation marks. I do not think it belongs here.
The rest seems to be okay.

 

[emsr2d2]

Gaya87, I'm pretty sure that we have previously asked you to write the long summary first and then the short version. It makes far more sense that way.

 

[Gaya87]

Gaya87, I'm pretty sure that we have previously asked you to write the long summary first and then the short version. It makes far more sense that way.

I'm very sorry. I forgot about it. Moving forward, I will write the long summary first and then the short one.

 

[Gaya87]

Not a teacher

First of all, I think it is a good idea to put the movie titles in quotes as this improves readability.

Your short summary is missing a verb, so it is not a complete sentence.

Take a closer look at the long summary: Right at the start, you wrote "an [...] movies". Furthermore, a verb is missing here. Finally, be very cautious when to use exclamation marks. I do not think it belongs here.
The rest seems to be okay.

Thank you for the feedback. Try this:

Long summary
The best Superman animated movies in one thrilling set. Follow the adventures of, Superman, as he meets his greatest challenge as a champion in Superman Doomsday. Next, in All-Star Superman, as a result of his arch nemesis Lex Luther's scheming, Superman is overexposed to radiation and is slowly dying. When catastrophe strikes, Superman once again rushes into action in Superman vs. The Elite.

Short summary
A great collection of Superman movies namely Superman Doomsday, All-Star Superman and Superman vs the Elite in one thrilling set with memorable characters to be enjoyed with your kids and family.