| I am writing an opening statement for my resume.
Can you kindly proofread?
"I engage in consulting and research on how to design and build processes for organizations learning and growth."
Please see the text in bold above.
Is "how to" here correct? OR should I take out "how to" and rather say ~ designing and buildingprocesses...
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Yes, the meaning would be slightly different. I think it would be fine, but you should be the judge. "I consult and research designing and building processes" would be more concise. (Although there must be a way to avoid
processes.)
I'm puzzled by "organizations learning and growing." You might mean:
- oranizations
' learning and growth.
- organizational learning and growth.
- organizations that are learning and growing.
- organizational development.
But even with one of those changes, it's still not clear what your consulting and research are about or whom they're for. Can you make your opening sentence more clear and concise? For example:
- I consult and do reseach on organizational learning and growth. This includes . . .