[Essay] Hail Mary

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Ashiuhto

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Please help me correct the following paragraph. Thanks!

Last night you called back home saying that you still hadn’t received the money that Mom wired to the Bank of China. We could feel that you were burning with anxiety, and we were also nervous with worry. We didn’t know what key link went wrong. Luckily, this morning you were unwilling to give up and went for a Hail Mary at the bank which is still open on Saturday morning.
 

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You called us last night to say you still hadn't received the money that Mom wired to the Bank of China. We could tell you were really worried, as were we. We don't know what went wrong with the transfer. We're glad to hear that you didn't give up and managed to get to the bank on Saturday morning.

I have no idea why you used "Hail Mary" in this piece at all. I don't know what you think "going for a Hail Mary at the bank" means.
 

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It intends to express the idea of “craving for other’s help” or “appealing for somebody for assistance.”
 

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I would just say "went to the bank for help".
 
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