MiboMibo
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- Joined
- Oct 4, 2014
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- Student or Learner
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- Chinese
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- Hong Kong
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- Australia
Hi,
This is just my impression towards the thing which is happening in my home city. I'm not really good at writing in politics but I think it's worth to write about the umbrella revolution in Hong Kong. Please help me to proof read it since I think some of the sentences have awful structures and grammar mistakes. Also, I'm looking for some advice in order to improve the content or the delivery of this piece of writing. Thank you very much ^_^:-D:-D:-D:-D
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Hong Kong Democracy
As a youngadult who had been living in Hong Kong for more than 18 years, I really love the dynamiclifestyle in Hong Kong. However, Hong Kong is in a serious troubletoday, which pops out a question of should Hong Kong citizens deservea real democracy? After the handover section from British colony toChina in 1997, Hong Kongers has started to be confused about theiridentities and also worry about the future of Hong Kong under thegovernance of China. The treaty of "One country, Two systems"was signed off by both Chinese and British parties, and Hong Kongersfundamentally can live under different rules from China, called“basic law”, meaning that people can enjoy the freedom of speechand the freedom of press. Also, a universal suffrage was claimed inorder to provide a truth freedom and democracy to Hong Kong people,yet this such a claim has not been carried out till now. Every timepeople go on the street to strike for their aspiration of theuniversal suffrage, their voice cannot be heard and even they areviewed as radicals.
On the 31stof August 2014, a restructuring of the election method in 2017 wasadvocated by the Chinese government, which is even restricted andless free than the election method today. The new system authorizes1,200 people on behalf of 8 millions Hong Kong citizens to pre-selectthe candidates of the chief executive election before Hong Kongcitizens are allowed to vote for their favor. It is not a realuniversal suffrage, but a trick. This incited the students from theHong Kong university to unfold the first class boycott in Hong Kongand invite our chief executive, CY Leung to a meeting. Days after,the event was developed to an occupying Central where is the HongKong's major business district since the government refused theinvite of the conversation. Accordingly, more people went to the street to protest the democracy in Hong Kong,voicing their concern regarding on the fake universal suffrage andthe useless government. Although this is the largest demonstrationever in Hong Kong, it is peaceful and people are self-disciplinewhich successfully achieves the international appreciation andsupport.
Howbeit, onthe 29th, over 100 thousands of protesters had experienced thedarkest period in Hong Kong. Riot police stepped up as to evacuatethe protesters out of the street with radical force. Despite the useof 89 canisters of tear gas and pepper spray, this triggered morereinforce to support the protesters on the street. People usedumbrellas for defense the pepper spray attack and used plastic wrapto protect their eyes and skin from the tear gas. Also, people builtup obstacles to prevent the assault. The police waere condemned dueto their unprofessional and immoral decision and even were deemed aspolitical tools.
Hong Kong,as a developed city and also one of the biggest international tradecentre in the world, people earn average 35,000 HKD(around 4,511 USD)monthly, but people can't enjoy the basic right which is the right tochoose. Hong Kongers cannot choose a path for their future, but areprovided everything unpractical by the Chinese governmentautomatically. To be frank, many disadvantages has been brought toHong Kong since 1997. The extreme increase of migrated people fromChina, the rise of commodity prices, the chaos of the city order,paring down Hong Kong citizens'social welfare... These are allexamples of what our motherland has brought to Hong Kong since wedon't have a real representative leader to control the affairs inHong Kong. Hong Kong people could only bear all those nonsenseimplement if citizens didn't awake and fight for the things theydeserve.
This is theday 15 of the demonstration, numerous of protesters are stillguarding the areas people occupied previously. Some people includingtriad members and plain-clothed policemen from the anti pro-democracyparties often come and distract the protesters, like throwing all theresources away and destroying the camps where people are taking arest. Moreover, acouple of girls were sexual harassed and some protesters were bitten,nonetheless the police did nothing to help control the situation.Also, thugs were not arrested but were escorted to leave by thepolice. Thus, Hong Kong police are very suspicious of conspiring withtriads. In these 15 days, the current chief executive only recordedthree short video clips in response to the tactic used by the policeand encourage protesters to leave.
Howridiculous a government can be to ignore its citizen's voice? Howheartless the police can be to evacuate those unarmed and defenselessprotesters with heavy violence? How shameless a chief executive canbe to not care about the social movement and refuse the face-to-faceconversation? Perhaps in turn, Hong Kong people would achieve nothingthrough this demonstration, but they have already guaranteed the highquality of Hong Kong people to the countries all over the world. Theygain support from the other countries and also remind the othersagain the corruption of Hong Kong and China. They did all they coulddo, they maintain the peace until the end of the movement. We, HongKong people are honorable.
This is just my impression towards the thing which is happening in my home city. I'm not really good at writing in politics but I think it's worth to write about the umbrella revolution in Hong Kong. Please help me to proof read it since I think some of the sentences have awful structures and grammar mistakes. Also, I'm looking for some advice in order to improve the content or the delivery of this piece of writing. Thank you very much ^_^:-D:-D:-D:-D
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Hong Kong Democracy
As a youngadult who had been living in Hong Kong for more than 18 years, I really love the dynamiclifestyle in Hong Kong. However, Hong Kong is in a serious troubletoday, which pops out a question of should Hong Kong citizens deservea real democracy? After the handover section from British colony toChina in 1997, Hong Kongers has started to be confused about theiridentities and also worry about the future of Hong Kong under thegovernance of China. The treaty of "One country, Two systems"was signed off by both Chinese and British parties, and Hong Kongersfundamentally can live under different rules from China, called“basic law”, meaning that people can enjoy the freedom of speechand the freedom of press. Also, a universal suffrage was claimed inorder to provide a truth freedom and democracy to Hong Kong people,yet this such a claim has not been carried out till now. Every timepeople go on the street to strike for their aspiration of theuniversal suffrage, their voice cannot be heard and even they areviewed as radicals.
On the 31stof August 2014, a restructuring of the election method in 2017 wasadvocated by the Chinese government, which is even restricted andless free than the election method today. The new system authorizes1,200 people on behalf of 8 millions Hong Kong citizens to pre-selectthe candidates of the chief executive election before Hong Kongcitizens are allowed to vote for their favor. It is not a realuniversal suffrage, but a trick. This incited the students from theHong Kong university to unfold the first class boycott in Hong Kongand invite our chief executive, CY Leung to a meeting. Days after,the event was developed to an occupying Central where is the HongKong's major business district since the government refused theinvite of the conversation. Accordingly, more people went to the street to protest the democracy in Hong Kong,voicing their concern regarding on the fake universal suffrage andthe useless government. Although this is the largest demonstrationever in Hong Kong, it is peaceful and people are self-disciplinewhich successfully achieves the international appreciation andsupport.
Howbeit, onthe 29th, over 100 thousands of protesters had experienced thedarkest period in Hong Kong. Riot police stepped up as to evacuatethe protesters out of the street with radical force. Despite the useof 89 canisters of tear gas and pepper spray, this triggered morereinforce to support the protesters on the street. People usedumbrellas for defense the pepper spray attack and used plastic wrapto protect their eyes and skin from the tear gas. Also, people builtup obstacles to prevent the assault. The police waere condemned dueto their unprofessional and immoral decision and even were deemed aspolitical tools.
Hong Kong,as a developed city and also one of the biggest international tradecentre in the world, people earn average 35,000 HKD(around 4,511 USD)monthly, but people can't enjoy the basic right which is the right tochoose. Hong Kongers cannot choose a path for their future, but areprovided everything unpractical by the Chinese governmentautomatically. To be frank, many disadvantages has been brought toHong Kong since 1997. The extreme increase of migrated people fromChina, the rise of commodity prices, the chaos of the city order,paring down Hong Kong citizens'social welfare... These are allexamples of what our motherland has brought to Hong Kong since wedon't have a real representative leader to control the affairs inHong Kong. Hong Kong people could only bear all those nonsenseimplement if citizens didn't awake and fight for the things theydeserve.
This is theday 15 of the demonstration, numerous of protesters are stillguarding the areas people occupied previously. Some people includingtriad members and plain-clothed policemen from the anti pro-democracyparties often come and distract the protesters, like throwing all theresources away and destroying the camps where people are taking arest. Moreover, acouple of girls were sexual harassed and some protesters were bitten,nonetheless the police did nothing to help control the situation.Also, thugs were not arrested but were escorted to leave by thepolice. Thus, Hong Kong police are very suspicious of conspiring withtriads. In these 15 days, the current chief executive only recordedthree short video clips in response to the tactic used by the policeand encourage protesters to leave.
Howridiculous a government can be to ignore its citizen's voice? Howheartless the police can be to evacuate those unarmed and defenselessprotesters with heavy violence? How shameless a chief executive canbe to not care about the social movement and refuse the face-to-faceconversation? Perhaps in turn, Hong Kong people would achieve nothingthrough this demonstration, but they have already guaranteed the highquality of Hong Kong people to the countries all over the world. Theygain support from the other countries and also remind the othersagain the corruption of Hong Kong and China. They did all they coulddo, they maintain the peace until the end of the movement. We, HongKong people are honorable.
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