Inspector arrested his own wife in case of shouting.

[tufguy]

"There is an inspector who arrested his own wife in ths case of shouting on him. He also handcuffed his neighbour and attached that handcuff to the main gate of his house. That inspector says that no matter how much he thrives or achieves or reach on top he will still remain attached to his land."

Please check.

 

[Tarheel]

"There is an inspector who arrested his own wife in ths case of shouting AT him. He also handcuffed his neighbour and attached that handcuff to the main gate of his house. That inspector says that no matter how much he ACHIEVES, he will still remain attached to his land."

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Was that the main gate of his neighbour's house?

 

[teechar]

That inspector says that no matter how much he thrives or achieves or reach on top he will still remain attached to his land."

What's the connection between that and the first part of the text?

 

[Tarheel]

What's the connection between that and the first part of the text?

There doesn't seem to be any connection at all.

 

[tufguy]

Was that the main gate of his neighbour's house?

Yes.

 

[tufguy]

What's the connection between that and the first part of the text?

It is the thinking of that inspector. He loves his birth place. He is very much conntected to his land.

 

[Tarheel]

It is the thinking of that inspector. He loves his birth place. He is very much conntected to his land.

I get that. But you abruptly change subject matter for no apparent reason. (That kind of thing can be confusing to a reader.)

 

[tufguy]

I get that. But you abruptly change subject matter for no apparent reason. (That kind of thing can be confusing to a reader.)

Could you please tell me about the mistakes as well?

 

[Tarheel]

"There is an inspector who arrested his own wife in ths case of shouting AT him. He also handcuffed his neighbour and attached thalt handcuff to the main gate of his house.

It is not entirely clear who "his" refers to (second sentence). So you might insert a parenthetical note, thus:

He also handcuffed his neighbour to the main gate of his (the neighbour's) house.

 

[tufguy]

It is not entirely clear who "his" refers to (second sentence). So you might insert a parenthetical note, thus:

He also handcuffed his neighbour to the main gate of his (the neighbour's) house.

Was this the only problem it had?

 

[Rover_KE]

Are you sure you don't mean 'shooting at him'?

I can't get beyond wondering where a police inspector can arrest his own wife for shouting at him.

 

[tufguy]

Are you sure you don't mean 'shooting at him'?

I can't get beyond wondering where a police inspector can arrest his own wife for shouting at him.

Yes.

 

[emsr2d2]

"There is an inspector who arrested his own wife [STRIKE]in ths case of[/STRIKE] for shooting [STRIKE]on[/STRIKE] at him. He also handcuffed his neighbour [STRIKE]and attached that handcuff[/STRIKE] to the main gate of his neighbour's house.

[STRIKE]That[/STRIKE] The inspector says that no matter how [STRIKE]much he thrives or achieves or reach on top[/STRIKE] successful he is in life, he will [STRIKE]still[/STRIKE] always remain [STRIKE]attached[/STRIKE] connected to his land."

Please check.

My suggested amendments are above. I have separated the completely unconnected texts into two paragraphs. I'm not even entirely sure how the handcuffing of the neighbour is connected to the shooting.

 

[Tarheel]

Was this the only problem it had?

Yes.

 

[Tarheel]

There is a big difference between shooting at somebody and shouting at somebody. (What a difference a letter makes!)

Was this a real incidence?

 

[tufguy]

There is a big difference between shooting at somebody and shouting at somebody. (What a difference a letter makes!)

Was this a real incidence?

No.

 

[Tarheel]

There is a big difference between shooting at somebody and shouting at somebody. (What a difference a letter makes!)

Was this a real incidence?

I meant to say "incident".