When I wasn't aware that I had a disease.

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tufguy

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"When I wasn't aware that I had T.B. I used go to my office regularly although I didn't feel good. I was loosing a lot of weight. I had chilles in the nights I would shiver in the summer season. I used to have fever in the night and in the morning I would not have fever. I stopped feeling hungry although I am fond of eating food and I eat a lot but in those days I didn't feel hungry at all. Those days I had a continuous pain in my lower back but there was another form of pain that emerged once or twice every day and that was unbearable. My left leg stopped working. I couldn't even bend over or put my shoes. My mom used to help me put my shoes on and I coughed a lot. I also threw up blood with mucus those days.

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When I wasn't aware that I had T.B., I used to go to my office (work?) regularly although I didn't feel [STRIKE]good[/STRIKE] well. I was[STRIKE] loosing [/STRIKE] losing a lot of weight. I had chill[STRIKE]e[/STRIKE]s [STRIKE]in the[/STRIKE] at night[STRIKE]s [/STRIKE]and I would shiver in the summer season. I used to have fever[STRIKE] in the[/STRIKE] at night[STRIKE] and[/STRIKE] but not in the morning [STRIKE]I would not have fever[/STRIKE]. I stopped feeling hungry although I [STRIKE]am[/STRIKE] was fond of eating [STRIKE]food[/STRIKE] and I [STRIKE]eat [/STRIKE] ate a lot but in those days I didn't feel hungry at all. Those days, I had a continuous pain in my lower back but there was another form of pain that [STRIKE]emerged[/STRIKE] occurred once or twice every day and that was unbearable. My left leg stopped working. I couldn't even bend over or put my shoes. My mom used to help me put my shoes on and I coughed a lot. I also threw up (coughed out?) blood with mucus those days.
 

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The phrase we use is "to cough up blood".
 

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I stopped feeling hungry although I am fond of eating food and I eat a lot but in those days I didn't feel hungry at all.
Can you see why a sentence like that one above can easily confuse readers? :shock:
 
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