grammar

[hatimhussain]

Please proofread my draft.

When in Canada, Katherine loved sitting daily under the open sky in the gleaming afternoons of chilling winter. She would sit in her lawn, outside her house, for couple of hours enjoying the splendid blending of bright sunshine and biting cold.

Thank you

Hatim Hussain

 

[Tarheel]

She would sit on her lawn

for a couple of hours

In the cold?

 

[Tarheel]

Canada

There's a better title.

 

[hatimhussain]

Tarheel

Please see the rephrased piece of writing.

She would sit on her lawn, outside her house, for a couple of hours enjoying the splendid blending of bright sunshine and biting cold weather.

 

[Tarheel]

You don't need outside her house. Nobody is going to think the lawn might be inside her house.

 

[Tarheel]

Re: Canada

You can keep outside if you change the word order. Perhaps:

She would sit outside on the lawn ....

See?

 

[hatimhussain]

Re: Canada

Tarheel

Your corrections about my grammar and of course about the title have helped me a lot.

 

[Tarheel]

Re: Canada

One more thing. Forget about "Thank you in advance" or any variation. Instead, find the "Thank" button and use it.