Erbab
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Hi!
I am preparing for IELTS and writing some essays to improve my skills. I have answered this question, and I would be grateful if you can help me find out my mistakes.
"Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.
Discuss both these two views and give your own opinion."
Some people share the idea of inflicting a certain punishment on all criminals for each kind of offence. However, other people suggest that conditions of each case should be considered while punishing people. I totally agree with the second idea, since our actions substantially depend on the circumstances we are experiencing. Therefore, it is not fair to judge people ignoring their mood and motivation.
There is no doubt that the number of people who tend to break the law should be minimised, if we want to live in a safer and a more peaceful society. Therefore, I believe goventments should have intimidating penalties to make sure an illegal act will not happen again. I believe, if a community has strict and fixed punishments for a certain type of crime, then people know how they will pay for their unlawful behaviours regardless of their conditions. This strictness of laws would make people become more obedient, since they will not have any execuse for their actions. It also makes judges’ work much easier. However, I strongly doubt that this system would bring about justice.
On the other hand, taking into account conditions of people before making the final decision could be considered to be a better way of judging. This is because, people always live under different circumstances, and these circumstances have a huge effect on their behaviours. For example, if someone makes an attempt on our lives, then we may happen to hurt or even to kill this person to protect ourselves. Therefore, our action must be considered within the scope of self defence. In my opinion, we are not totally responsible for our unlawful behaviours in this case, since we had to defend ourselves not to be hurted or killed. As a result, I find this judicial system much more fair than the other one.
To conlude, it is clear that inflicting a fixed punishment on people is not fair because reasons behind actions are vitally important to make a healty judgement. Therefore, I totally support the second idea of punishing individuals. "
I am preparing for IELTS and writing some essays to improve my skills. I have answered this question, and I would be grateful if you can help me find out my mistakes.
"Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.
Discuss both these two views and give your own opinion."
Some people share the idea of inflicting a certain punishment on all criminals for each kind of offence. However, other people suggest that conditions of each case should be considered while punishing people. I totally agree with the second idea, since our actions substantially depend on the circumstances we are experiencing. Therefore, it is not fair to judge people ignoring their mood and motivation.
There is no doubt that the number of people who tend to break the law should be minimised, if we want to live in a safer and a more peaceful society. Therefore, I believe goventments should have intimidating penalties to make sure an illegal act will not happen again. I believe, if a community has strict and fixed punishments for a certain type of crime, then people know how they will pay for their unlawful behaviours regardless of their conditions. This strictness of laws would make people become more obedient, since they will not have any execuse for their actions. It also makes judges’ work much easier. However, I strongly doubt that this system would bring about justice.
On the other hand, taking into account conditions of people before making the final decision could be considered to be a better way of judging. This is because, people always live under different circumstances, and these circumstances have a huge effect on their behaviours. For example, if someone makes an attempt on our lives, then we may happen to hurt or even to kill this person to protect ourselves. Therefore, our action must be considered within the scope of self defence. In my opinion, we are not totally responsible for our unlawful behaviours in this case, since we had to defend ourselves not to be hurted or killed. As a result, I find this judicial system much more fair than the other one.
To conlude, it is clear that inflicting a fixed punishment on people is not fair because reasons behind actions are vitally important to make a healty judgement. Therefore, I totally support the second idea of punishing individuals. "
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