rodgers white
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- Joined
- Jan 17, 2016
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- English Teacher
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- Chinese
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- China
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- China
Hi there. Would you please proofread the following text? Any help would be appreciated.
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“I see father putting a book wrapped in oiled leather into a crevice. The scene becomes blurry, and then a feeling of many years, maybe thousands, passing. I see my grandfather, but no, it’s not him. There are others there with him, and they call him Yi Yang, but a voice tells me he’s Rui; his daughter Meili is there too, but they call her Debra. I’m confused by these name changes. More confusing is another girl with mother’s name, Jingying; she and Debra look like sisters, twins, but not quite identical. Somehow I know that they are but at the same time that they are not sisters. When I look at Debra, the voice says, ‘made’, and when I look at Jingying, the voice says, ‘born’. I’m not sure what all this means.”
Everyone else looks confused too, but Gan’s expression changes to one of enlightenment. “I think I know. Your grandfather and Rui were working on ways to give Rui autonomous mobility. When I left, they had already created machines in which Rui could put part of his mind and move about. They made one for Meili too, but the machines were too limited to be a permanent solution, and so, the work continued. Somehow, they must have found a way to make human bodies in which to put their minds.”
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“I see father putting a book wrapped in oiled leather into a crevice. The scene becomes blurry, and then a feeling of many years, maybe thousands, passing. I see my grandfather, but no, it’s not him. There are others there with him, and they call him Yi Yang, but a voice tells me he’s Rui; his daughter Meili is there too, but they call her Debra. I’m confused by these name changes. More confusing is another girl with mother’s name, Jingying; she and Debra look like sisters, twins, but not quite identical. Somehow I know that they are but at the same time that they are not sisters. When I look at Debra, the voice says, ‘made’, and when I look at Jingying, the voice says, ‘born’. I’m not sure what all this means.”
Everyone else looks confused too, but Gan’s expression changes to one of enlightenment. “I think I know. Your grandfather and Rui were working on ways to give Rui autonomous mobility. When I left, they had already created machines in which Rui could put part of his mind and move about. They made one for Meili too, but the machines were too limited to be a permanent solution, and so, the work continued. Somehow, they must have found a way to make human bodies in which to put their minds.”
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