[General] Turnover

[Economist2010]

"Option 1: We found that the turnover comes high/alot from those who don't enrolled in the point system.

Option 2: We found that those who enrolled in the point system are less likely to turnover so we made an aggressive campaign to triple the point for those who will newly be enrolled in the point system"

I appreciate your help in editing the below two options.

 

[Tarheel]

What do you mean by "turnover" there?

(Note that "a lot" is two words.)

 

[Economist2010]

What do you mean by "turnover" there?

(Note that "a lot" is two words.)

Turnover means numbers of customers who leave the company.

 

[Tarheel]

You have the wrong word. The word "turnover" doesn't work there. Also, customers don't leave a company.

The company needs to do a better job of keeping its customers. That's because some of them have been taking their business elsewhere.

 

[Economist2010]

You have the wrong word. The word "turnover" doesn't work there. Also, customers don't leave a company.

The company needs to do a better job of keeping its customers. That's because some of them have been taking their business elsewhere.

Thanks for your explanation and advice however I am here to get my text modified. If you still need any explanation related to my text, it will be my pleasure to explain it ��

 

[Tarheel]

Thanks for your explanation and advice. However I am here to get my text modified. If you still need an explanation related to my text, it will be my pleasure to provide it ��

I am baffled.

 

[Tarheel]

Keeping my comments in mind, I suggest that you rewrite those sentences.

 

[emsr2d2]

"High staff turnover" is a phrase used in the UK for a business in which employees come and go at a spectacular rate. There is one such business where I live. The average length of time people work there is four months, even though it's a huge multi-national company with a massive workplace. A business where people don't often leave and therefore don't need to be replace can be described as having "low staff turnover".

Even with that, your post makes no sense to me.

 

[Tarheel]

There is often a high turnover at places that employ a lot of temporary workers.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

"Option 1: We have found high turnover among those who don't enroll in the point system.

Option 2: We have found that those who enroll in the point system are less likely to drop out, so we carried out an aggressive campaign that included tripling the points for those who enroll in it."

I appreciate your help in editing the above two options.

I think Tarheel was baffled because of your odd use of turnover.

What is this for?

 

[Tarheel]

I think Tarheel was baffled because of your odd use of turnover.

Also, he seemed to be complaining that I wasn't helping him enough. (That's not a way to win friends and influence people.)

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

Turnover means numbers of customers who leave the company.

No. It's not a number. It's the rate at which people come and go. And it does not only refer to a company's customers.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

Thanks for your explanation and advice. However, I am here to get my text modified. If you still need any explanation related to my text, it will be my pleasure to explain it.

I don't understand your comment. Tarheel did modify it. He gave you two sentences in post #4.

Avoid run-on sentences. Punctuate the ends of all sentences.