Economist2010
Member
- Joined
- Dec 22, 2011
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Arabic
- Home Country
- Egypt
- Current Location
- Egypt
I appreciate your help in proofreading the below e-mail.
"I am writing to show how grateful I am, for supporting my earlier candidature of joining the bank but unfortunately there was a misfortune and it ends up with me not joining the bank. I am also writing to you to get your consultation on how to sort out the misfortune that happened and make it work to join the bank, since you used to be the CEO, you know everything inside out and I am sure that you will help me out with the right consultation.
All the people I made interviews with were enthusiastic for me and everything was going well until Mr. Farid entered the matter. He had a different point of views and concern of why I am putting you as a CEO in the loop and he said that this way doesn't work with him which complicated the matter further. He also think that I am exaggerating in the numbers of my achievements.
We all believe that experience is the best proof accordingly I need to be given the room to prove what is being considered exaggerating can be done in reality and to make another success story of trible the figures within three month time and if this has not been achieved, with all pleasure, I will resign.
I need your opinion whom I should approach to bring my talent into the bank and who gives me the full support until I make a turnaround success story."
"I am writing to show how grateful I am, for supporting my earlier candidature of joining the bank but unfortunately there was a misfortune and it ends up with me not joining the bank. I am also writing to you to get your consultation on how to sort out the misfortune that happened and make it work to join the bank, since you used to be the CEO, you know everything inside out and I am sure that you will help me out with the right consultation.
All the people I made interviews with were enthusiastic for me and everything was going well until Mr. Farid entered the matter. He had a different point of views and concern of why I am putting you as a CEO in the loop and he said that this way doesn't work with him which complicated the matter further. He also think that I am exaggerating in the numbers of my achievements.
We all believe that experience is the best proof accordingly I need to be given the room to prove what is being considered exaggerating can be done in reality and to make another success story of trible the figures within three month time and if this has not been achieved, with all pleasure, I will resign.
I need your opinion whom I should approach to bring my talent into the bank and who gives me the full support until I make a turnaround success story."