Jane stepped out onto the balcony.

[alpacinou]

Is this correct and natural?

Jane stepped out onto the hotel's balcony. Leaning over the glass railing, she gazed at the scenery, taking it in. Nestled among verdant mountains was a gentle Mediterranean cove, sparkling in the late spring sun. The turquoise waters met the cloudless sky at the horizon. She could hear faint sounds of music drifting from a beach party, mingled with the cheerful murmur from several beachgoers. A breeze blew in her direction, bringing the salty scent of the sea. Ibiza was more pleasant than she expected.

 

[emsr2d2]

Is this correct and natural?

Jane stepped out onto the [STRIKE]hotel's[/STRIKE] [hotel] balcony. Leaning over the glass railing, she [STRIKE]gazed at[/STRIKE] took in the scenery. [STRIKE]taking it in.[/STRIKE] Nestled among verdant mountains was a [STRIKE]gentle[/STRIKE] small/tiny Mediterranean cove, sparkling in the late spring sun. The turquoise waters met the cloudless sky at the horizon. She could hear the faint sounds of music drifting from a beach party, mingled with the cheerful murmur [STRIKE]from[/STRIKE] of [STRIKE]several[/STRIKE] some/a few beachgoers. A breeze blew [STRIKE]in her direction[/STRIKE] towards her, bringing the salty scent of the sea. Ibiza was more pleasant than she expected.

See above. "Gentle cove" doesn't work.