admission in institute

[maarsha talha]

Hi please let me know if my vocab or sentence need to be correct. Please help me out if it is wrong please...

Subject: intended for admission in your CHACHE Institute

Hi,
With due respect, i am Maarsha Talha, age 19. I am American nationality, mother tounge is english. But i am living in Pakistan and done all the education from Pakistan. I've completed my college ( Inter/12th Grade ).
On the other hand, i have 2 years teaching experience in montessori from Kids World Secondary School and i got certificate aswell.
Initially, want to ask that i can get admission in this Institute and in which CHACHE level i will got admission and what if in pakistan i'll do Montessori course from LMI ( London Montessori International ) then there is chance to have admission in any CHACHE level.
I would appreciate your immediate attention to this matter and Apologise for any inconvenience.
Thank You so much.

 

[emsr2d2]

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What on earth do you think "plx" means?

 

[maarsha talha]

Please correct my mail if it is wrong please its urgent

 

[emsr2d2]

Hi please let me know if my vocab or sentence need to be correct. Please help me out if it is wrong please...

Subject: [STRIKE]intended[/STRIKE] Application for admission [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] to [STRIKE]your[/STRIKE] CHACHE Institute

[STRIKE]Hi,[/STRIKE]

Dear [name of recipient]

[STRIKE]With due respect,[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]i am[/STRIKE] My name is Maarsha Talha, I am [STRIKE]age[/STRIKE] 19,[STRIKE]. I am[/STRIKE] an American national[STRIKE]ity[/STRIKE] and my mother [STRIKE]tounge[/STRIKE] tongue is English. [STRIKE]But i am living[/STRIKE] I live in Pakistan and [STRIKE]done[/STRIKE] all [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] my education has taken place [STRIKE]from[/STRIKE] in Pakistan. I've completed 12th grade [STRIKE]my[/STRIKE] (college). [STRIKE]( Inter/12th Grade ).[/STRIKE]

[STRIKE]On the other hand, [/STRIKE] I have 2 years' Montessori teaching experience [STRIKE]in montessori from[/STRIKE] at Kids World Secondary School and I have [STRIKE]got[/STRIKE] a certificate (a certificate in what?!)[STRIKE]aswell[/STRIKE].

[STRIKE]Initially, want [/STRIKE] I would like to ask [STRIKE]that[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]i can get[/STRIKE] for admission [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] to this Institute and [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] to which CHACHE level I [STRIKE]will[/STRIKE] would go into. [STRIKE]got admission [/STRIKE][STRIKE]and[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]what[/STRIKE] Would it make any difference if I took a Montessori course from LMI (London Montessori Internationa) [STRIKE]if[/STRIKE] in Pakistan [STRIKE]i'll do Montessori course from LMI ( London Montessori International ) then there is chance to have admission in any CHACHE level.[/STRIKE]

I [STRIKE]would[/STRIKE] appreciate your [STRIKE]immediate[/STRIKE] attention to this matter. [STRIKE]and Apologise for any inconvenience.[/STRIKE]

Yours sincerely

[Your name]
[STRIKE]Thank You so much.[/STRIKE]

Please don't tell us that things are urgent. We are volunteers and we do things in our own time, not to your timescale. However, I happened to have 5 minutes free this morning so I have done what I can with your letter. It was somewhat confusing as to whether it's an actual application or just asking for information.

Given the number of corrections I had to make, it was very surprising to see that you consider your mother tongue to be English. I assume you mean that you were born in America where the main language is English but then you went to Pakistan at a very early age and have not used English as your main language at all.