Can I say a desire overpowered a feeling?

[alpacinou]

Hello.

Can I say a desire overpowered a feeling?

What do you think about the sentence I have written?

She lusted after him for over two years but he ended up marrying someone else. Now, she wanted to find a way to get back at him. Now, the desire for revenge overpowered her seemingly uncontrollable lust.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

Hello.

Can I say a desire overpowered a feeling?

What do you think about the sentence I have written?

She lusted after him for over two years, but he ended up marrying someone else. Now, she wanted to find a way to get back at him. Now, the desire for revenge overpowered her seemingly uncontrollable lust.

You're really on a roll today!

Yes, one feeling can overpower another. You used the overpowered correctly.

 

[teechar]

I would remove the second "Now".

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

I would remove the second "Now".

I noticed the repetition, but I like it. It has a nice cadence.

As long as it's intentional, I'd leave it.

 

[alpacinou]

I put the second "now" to make a tad more dramatic.

 

[emsr2d2]

I put the second "now" in to make it a tad more dramatic.

See above.

 

[alpacinou]

See above.

I apologize for being sloppy when it comes to typing. And thank you my fastidious friend for correcting my mistakes.

 

[Rover_KE]

my fastidious friend

emsr2d2 won't be pleased to be called fastidious. [click]

A more suitable word here is meticulous.

 

[emsr2d2]

A few months ago, my tennis coach (Argentinian) sent me a message in Spanish that I thought meant "You were a bit fastidious this morning". I had had a bad morning, not played well and I was very (loudly) critical of my own play. I assumed he was referring to that. Then I looked up "fastidiosa" and discovered it meant "annoying"! :shock:

 

[alpacinou]

my fastidious friend

emsr2d2 won't be pleased to be called fastidious. [click]

A more suitable word here is meticulous.

I thought fastidious can be both negative and positive!

 

[alpacinou]

fastidious


[fæstɪ̱diəs]
1) [COLOR=c_default_color]ADJ-GRADED If you say that someone is fastidious, you mean that they pay great attention to detail because they like everything to be very neat, accurate, and in good order.

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fas·tidi·ous

/fæˈstɪdiəs; NAmE / [COLOR=c_default_color]adjective
1.
being careful that every detail of sth is correct
SYN meticulous:

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[h=3]fastidious[/h]
very careful about small details in your appearance, work etc SYN meticulous:
people who are fastidious about personal hygiene



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[GoesStation]

I put the second "now" to make a tad more dramatic.

Here's a rule of thumb for good writing: whenever you feel like your writing is insufficiently dramatic, it isn't.