Fredoon
Member
- Joined
- Jan 13, 2022
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Persian
- Home Country
- Denmark
- Current Location
- Switzerland
Dear Friends
I just wrote the following essay. Could you please take a look at it and inform me of my mistakes.
I prefer to have a plain room for two significant reasons.
First, the room decoration puts me to expense. I am a student with limited financial resources, so I need to care about my expenses. If I kept my room simple, I could maintain the portion of my budget allocated for adorning costs and spend it on buying books and clothes.
In addition, rooms with lots of adornments put me off my stride. Since I am a student, the environment must be conducive to learning. If I surrounded my room with various decorations, my attention would occasionally turn to them and unconsciously think about them. The mind-wandering from my work makes me lose track of time, finding myself not doing my homework.
I just wrote the following essay. Could you please take a look at it and inform me of my mistakes.
I prefer to have a plain room for two significant reasons.
First, the room decoration puts me to expense. I am a student with limited financial resources, so I need to care about my expenses. If I kept my room simple, I could maintain the portion of my budget allocated for adorning costs and spend it on buying books and clothes.
In addition, rooms with lots of adornments put me off my stride. Since I am a student, the environment must be conducive to learning. If I surrounded my room with various decorations, my attention would occasionally turn to them and unconsciously think about them. The mind-wandering from my work makes me lose track of time, finding myself not doing my homework.