formal email

[nazanin nadri]

Hey I need a little bit of help writing a formal Email. My note is:

Dear sir or madam,
This is to request more information about your master courses at Turin university. I am extremely interested in sustainability design course and I am anxious to apply for it in your renowned university for admission in 2016.
I have got my bachelor’s degree in architecture at Ferdowsi university of Mashhad.
First I would greatly appreciate some information about English and Italian language requirements for an Iranian student.
Second I would like to inquire about the way presenting my portfolio.
Thank you in advance for your attention to my request. I look forward to receiving your response.
Yours sincerely.

 

[teechar]

Dear Sir or Madam,

This is to request more information about your Sustainable Design masters course at Turin University. I am extremely interested in [STRIKE]sustainability design[/STRIKE] that course, and I am [STRIKE]anxious[/STRIKE] eager to apply for it in your renowned university for admission in 2016.

I have got [STRIKE]my[/STRIKE] a bachelor’s degree in architecture [STRIKE]at[/STRIKE] from Ferdowsi University of Mashhad.

First, I would greatly appreciate some information about the English and Italian language requirements for an Iranian student.

Second, I would like to inquire about [STRIKE]the way presenting[/STRIKE] how I should present my portfolio as part of my application.

Thank you in advance for your attention, and [STRIKE]to my request.[/STRIKE] I look forward to receiving your response.

Yours faithfully, [STRIKE]sincerely.[/STRIKE]