Jacqey
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- Sep 7, 2018
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- Australia
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Please grammar check and see if its a good story or not.
Weird Story
The Creature
The Farmer looks over his farm from his home on the hill as the candlelight cast strange shadows around the house. A shadow sneaks along the edge of treeline bordering a large forest, it separates from the treeline and makes a bee-line for the barn cutting a swath through the wheat, smashing a hole in the side of the barn. The farmer starts shouting as he comes out the door with a shotgun in hand and his dog trailing behind. What is stranger is that the dog didn’t bark once as the shadow went into the barn as all dogs should. This doesn’t pass the farmers mind once as he cuts through the wheat and with a loud blast from his shotgun he shatters the rusty old lock holding the barn door. With his shotgun up and ready, he prepares himself for a bear or something else to jump out but what surprises him even more is when the shadow jumps out from the back of the barn where it had been hiding behind a stack of haybales. It was small it looked like some cross between a dog and your worst nightmare. It walked back and forth in front of the farmer and, suddenly without warning it jumps at the farmer, he lets out a scream as the creature starts clawing at his face opening his mouth and forcing itself into his mouth. The dog, hackles raised leaps at the farmer and, instead of attacking the creature it started attacking the farmer causing large gashes to open up on the farmer's body. After a minute the farmer's body is lying on the dusty hard packed dirt and unmoving, the dog strangely enough is lying next to him quietly no longer attacking him. Suddenly the Farmer sits up and starts stretching around feeling its surroundings. Then, suddenly without warning he grabs the dog and starts ripping it apart limb from limb. After he’s finished with the dog he gets up staggering towards the house with a cold smile, his open wounds gushing blood. He reaches the house and walks through the already open door towards the lounge room where his family is. All you can hear is the screams of his children and the cold laughter from the Farmer. Suddenly the screaming stops, and he comes out the door blood soaking his clothes leaving a trail of blood behind him. Suddenly the farmer's eyes roll back in his head showing the whites of his eyes as his body collapses. The creature climbs out of his mouth and heads back into the forest, disappearing into the night.
Weird Story
The Creature
The Farmer looks over his farm from his home on the hill as the candlelight cast strange shadows around the house. A shadow sneaks along the edge of treeline bordering a large forest, it separates from the treeline and makes a bee-line for the barn cutting a swath through the wheat, smashing a hole in the side of the barn. The farmer starts shouting as he comes out the door with a shotgun in hand and his dog trailing behind. What is stranger is that the dog didn’t bark once as the shadow went into the barn as all dogs should. This doesn’t pass the farmers mind once as he cuts through the wheat and with a loud blast from his shotgun he shatters the rusty old lock holding the barn door. With his shotgun up and ready, he prepares himself for a bear or something else to jump out but what surprises him even more is when the shadow jumps out from the back of the barn where it had been hiding behind a stack of haybales. It was small it looked like some cross between a dog and your worst nightmare. It walked back and forth in front of the farmer and, suddenly without warning it jumps at the farmer, he lets out a scream as the creature starts clawing at his face opening his mouth and forcing itself into his mouth. The dog, hackles raised leaps at the farmer and, instead of attacking the creature it started attacking the farmer causing large gashes to open up on the farmer's body. After a minute the farmer's body is lying on the dusty hard packed dirt and unmoving, the dog strangely enough is lying next to him quietly no longer attacking him. Suddenly the Farmer sits up and starts stretching around feeling its surroundings. Then, suddenly without warning he grabs the dog and starts ripping it apart limb from limb. After he’s finished with the dog he gets up staggering towards the house with a cold smile, his open wounds gushing blood. He reaches the house and walks through the already open door towards the lounge room where his family is. All you can hear is the screams of his children and the cold laughter from the Farmer. Suddenly the screaming stops, and he comes out the door blood soaking his clothes leaving a trail of blood behind him. Suddenly the farmer's eyes roll back in his head showing the whites of his eyes as his body collapses. The creature climbs out of his mouth and heads back into the forest, disappearing into the night.
