Abdulrahman15975
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Hello,
Please take a look at my article and tell me what do I need to change in order to improve my writing.
Since writing has always been my least favorite part, I've only written few articles before.
This article is proving that TV isn't the most important invention in the last 100 years and gives an alternative.
Nowadays, most people agree on the importance of television. The invention that gave the word (entertainment) a whole new meaning by introducing us to a wide range of visual materials including programs, movies and other stuff in which almost everyone can find something that he really likes. But no matter how entertaining the television is, it cannot be considered the most important invention 100 years, as some people may believer.
In my opinion, the most important invention in the last century was the telephone, which later was improved into the cell phone. The importance of that invention lies in the fact that things are considered important or not depending on the purpose that they serve and how it affects our lives. And the fact that that our need to communicate with each other in order to solve our problems and to socialize, is much more important to us than the need of entertaining ourselves by watching something we like.
Also the telephone has completely changed the concept of communication forever, and has saved us a huge amount of time and money which positively affected our lives on so many levels.
Please take a look at my article and tell me what do I need to change in order to improve my writing.
Since writing has always been my least favorite part, I've only written few articles before.
This article is proving that TV isn't the most important invention in the last 100 years and gives an alternative.
Nowadays, most people agree on the importance of television. The invention that gave the word (entertainment) a whole new meaning by introducing us to a wide range of visual materials including programs, movies and other stuff in which almost everyone can find something that he really likes. But no matter how entertaining the television is, it cannot be considered the most important invention 100 years, as some people may believer.
In my opinion, the most important invention in the last century was the telephone, which later was improved into the cell phone. The importance of that invention lies in the fact that things are considered important or not depending on the purpose that they serve and how it affects our lives. And the fact that that our need to communicate with each other in order to solve our problems and to socialize, is much more important to us than the need of entertaining ourselves by watching something we like.
Also the telephone has completely changed the concept of communication forever, and has saved us a huge amount of time and money which positively affected our lives on so many levels.