how to write a payment requirement message

[Lemon2017]

Hi All,

Can someone kindly help me to improve below MSM on tuition payment requirement to parents from a training agency? Thanks.


Dear Mr Lam, here is a friendly reminder about the tutoringfee submission for your son Xiao Lam for month of April 2017. You are expectedto pay it before 10th April, 2017. Thank you in advance.
Your kindly support is a great motivation for us.
ABC Training Agency

 

[emsr2d2]

Hi ​all,

Can someone kindly help me to improve [STRIKE]below[/STRIKE] the MSM (what is an "MSM"?) below on tuition payment requirements to parents from a training agency? Thanks.


Dear Mr Lam,

[STRIKE]here[/STRIKE] This is a friendly reminder about the tutoring (space needed here) fee submission for your son Xiao Lam for the month of April 2017. You are expected (space needed here) to pay it before 10th April, 2017.

Thank you in advance.

Your [STRIKE]kindly[/STRIKE] support is [STRIKE]a great motivation for us.[/STRIKE] greatly appreciated.

ABC Training Agency

See above.

 

[tedmc]

I have heard of "tuition fees", not "tutoring fees".

 

[Lemon2017]

See above.

Thanks for your help.
It should be SMS rather than MSM.

 

[Lemon2017]

I have heard of "tuition fees", not "tutoring fees".

Yes
you are right, thanks to point it out.

 

[Rover_KE]

Yes, you are right. Thanks for pointing it out.

That was a lazy effort, Lemon.

Have you spotted the 'Thank' button in the bottom left-hand corner of every post? Clicking on this means you don't have to write 'thank you' messages.