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[rodgers white]

Hi there. Would you please proofread the following text? Any help would be appreciated.

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Gan didn’t want a big team. He just needed Lili. She was the most experienced, and by only choosing her, he could more easily guarantee the dream stayed a secret until the right time came for it to be shared.

Lili, of course, took charge, though it wasn’t anything like a takeover but more like an understanding. “In her dream, the asteroids come in from the east. So, to avoid any that may under or overshoot the village, we should look south or north. Do you have any preference?” Gan said. “There is not likely to be much to the south we have all hunted in that direction many times. If there were anything worth considering, we’d more than likely have heard about it by now. Let’s try north.”

Lili laughed. “Your daughter dreams the future, do you read minds? Those are exactly my thoughts."

Gan and Lili searched the north looking for a sheltered clearing big enough for the entire village, though it was not a clearing they found, but a cave. The cave entrance was not large, big enough for two people to enter without ducking, but the inside led to a gigantic cavern with several smaller side caves. It was as near to perfect as they could have hoped for, except for one thing, a family of bears.

 

[tedmc]

Hi there. Would you please proofread the following text? Any help would be appreciated.

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Gan didn’t want a big team. He just needed Lili. She was the most experienced (in what?), and by only choosing her, he could more easily guarantee the dream stayed a secret until the right time came for it to be shared.

Lili, of course, took charge, though it wasn’t anything like a takeover but more like an understanding. “In her dream, the asteroids come in from the east. So, to avoid any that may under or overshoot the village, we should look to the south or north. Do you have any preference?” Gan said. “There is not likely to be much to the south which we have all hunted in that direction many times. If there were anything worth considering, we’d more than likely have heard about it by now. Let’s try north.”

Lili laughed. “Your daughter dreams the future, (comma splice) do you read minds? Those are exactly my thoughts."

Gan and Lili searched the north looking for a sheltered clearing big enough for the entire village (for what purpose?), though it was not a clearing they found, but a cave. The cave entrance was not large, big enough for two people to enter without ducking, but the inside led to a gigantic cavern with several smaller side caves. It was as near to perfect as they could have hoped for, except for one thing - a family of bears.

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[rodgers white]

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Thank you for your time. As for your questions, Lili was the most experienced leading hunter. She had a great leadership as if she was born with. So Gan needed Lili to take charge of what they would do next - looking for a sheltered clearing - because the team really wanted someone to handle all the emergencies when they searched for the place in the mountainous, forest-covered north. Obviously, she was the best choise. By the way, a sheltered clearing was used as a safe place for villagers to stay when the time came - the asteroids would fall down towards the village from the east.