same meaning of a sentence

[Azah]

Suppose I have been given a sentence to rewrite it without changing its meaning. Then I tried my best to write another form of given sentence. And after writing my sentence I went to the person, who has given the sentence, to ask him- Whether my sentence is right or wrong and whether it conveys the same meaning or not. Can I use the following sentence to ask him? i.e, does the following sentence make any sense?

"If I write the above sentence in the following way, do you think that the following sentence can be considered as a correct with having similar meaning of your given sentence/ with having as like as meaning that your sentence has. (I want to say this sentence to this person).

 

[Tarheel]

First of all, don't make things too complicated. I would say something like:

Have I got it right?

OR

Is this what you wanted?

 

[Azah]

Thanks for your options. Please give the correct version of my own sentence.

 

[Tarheel]

Perhaps:

Is this sentence grammatically correct, and does it say what you want it to say?

 

[Tarheel]

Make your sentences brief and to the point. Make it your goal to achieve clarity. Don't make things too complicated.