Special Action Unit...

[Gaya87]

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

Short
Special Action Unit, Jay has to rescue his sister, Dian, an undercover agent who has been kidnapped by a mysterious man that is framing Jay for murder.

Long
Jay is an assault leader for Malaysia`s elite and deadly special force known as the UTK (Unit Tindakhas), and he and his squad of operatives are every terrorist`s worst nightmare. However, a mysterious terrorist has framed Jay for the murder of one of his squad members, and has also captured his sister Dian, who is an undercover agent. To save her sister, Jay must race against time to unravel the secret and reason as to why this terrorist is trying to destroy him.

 

[teechar]

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

Short
A Special Action Unit officer, Jay, has to rescue his sister, Dian, an undercover agent who has been kidnapped by a mysterious man that is framing Jay for murder.

Long
Jay is an assault leader for Malaysia's elite [STRIKE]and deadly[/STRIKE] special force known as the UTK (Unit Tindakhas), and he and his squad of operatives are every terrorist's worst nightmare. However, a mysterious terrorist has framed Jay for the murder of one of his squad members, and has also captured his sister Dian, who is an undercover agent. To save [STRIKE]her[/STRIKE] his sister, Jay must race against time to unravel the secret and reason as to why this terrorist is trying to destroy him.

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