[Grammar] "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

[kite]

Hi teachers,

"These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth." Source: BBC news

My version : These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died after two days they were born.

Is my version correct?

 

[bhaisahab]

Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

Hi teachers,

"These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth." Source: BBC news

My version : These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died after two days they were born.

Is my version correct?

No, it isn't.

 

[kite]

Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

Isn't there any other way to rewrite the original version?

 

[bhaisahab]

Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

Isn't there any other way to rewrite the original version?

Almost certainly, but why do you want to?

 

[kite]

Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

I am sometimes confused about the use of "after". You would have seen how I had used "after" in my own sentence. So I want to know whether there is another way to rewrite the sentence with the word "after".

 

[bhaisahab]

Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

I am sometimes confused about the use of "after". You would have seen how I had used "after" in my own sentence. So I want to know whether there is another way to rewrite the sentence with the word "after".

The original sentence already contains the word "after".

 

[5jj]

Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

You could say, "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died [STRIKE]after[/STRIKE], two days after they were born."

 

[Tdol]

Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

The original version does avoid repeating born, though.

 

[5jj]

Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

The original version does avoid repeating born, though.

"These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died after, two days after birth."

;-)

I still think the original is fine.