another one, thank you very much~/The woods

[jimmy]

The woods

Silent woods sound whisper，
Something strange swept across my sight.
As darkness close on,
The evil arise,
And axe rose,
Blood burst forth.


Sleeping Kitty suddenly bray,
Nothing unusual seen but the dark.
As the poor heart calm down,
The lamps off,
Eyes on you,
Maybe bloody axe also.


Should you sleep soundly?
Or just lie in you bed?
Although God is not with you.
Clasp the axe,
Tear up the dark,
And light shine you.

[curmudgeon]

The woods

Silent woods whisper，
Something strange sweeps across my sight.
As darkness closes in,
The evil rises,
An axe rose,
Blood burst forth.


Sleeping Kitty suddenly cried,
Nothing but the dark.
As the poor heart beats,
The light goes off,
And eyes are on you,
Maybe, too the bloody axe.


Should you sleep soundly?
Or just lie in you bed?
Although God is not with you.
Clasp the axe,
Tear up the dark,
And the light will shine on you.

very good.

[jimmy]

thanks.

[JACOOL]

good job! but I feel a little confused about the way you use the tenses, any answer? by the way a little work on spelling, otherwise you're great keep writing. J