Rachel Adams
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- Joined
- Nov 4, 2018
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- Native Language
- Russian
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- Georgia
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- Georgia
Could you please correct my essay? I added questions about the parts I wasn't sure about. Should contractions be avoided in essays? Such contractions as "there's", "I've", etc?
I think, (I think the comma after "think" is wrong) that if someone is a deeply religious person, he found the truth in God and wants to dedicate his life to him by refraining from worldly passion and finding enlightenment is really fine and worthy of respect. My attitude to religion changed when I was 25 and I think it may still (I am not sure "still" is correct. I mean it may change again) change. I considered myself as orthodox Christian (should I capitalize both orthodox and Christian?) until I was 25. I didn't think much of it and I didn't understand what it meant at all. That was until the train accident I was involved. Later, (should I remove comma after "later"?) I started finding answers to my questions about religion. And after that I've come to consider myself an atheist. (Should I use the present perfect or the past simple)
Now, I don't belong to any religion or any anti-religious group. I just think that there's some higher power that controls everything. I realized that this world is so complicated and so wonderfully constructed that there's no way to deny or prove the existence of God.
I think, (I think the comma after "think" is wrong) that if someone is a deeply religious person, he found the truth in God and wants to dedicate his life to him by refraining from worldly passion and finding enlightenment is really fine and worthy of respect. My attitude to religion changed when I was 25 and I think it may still (I am not sure "still" is correct. I mean it may change again) change. I considered myself as orthodox Christian (should I capitalize both orthodox and Christian?) until I was 25. I didn't think much of it and I didn't understand what it meant at all. That was until the train accident I was involved. Later, (should I remove comma after "later"?) I started finding answers to my questions about religion. And after that I've come to consider myself an atheist. (Should I use the present perfect or the past simple)
Now, I don't belong to any religion or any anti-religious group. I just think that there's some higher power that controls everything. I realized that this world is so complicated and so wonderfully constructed that there's no way to deny or prove the existence of God.