Would you like to take a look at my motivation letter please?

[Mazi]

Good afternoon,
I am going to apply for Master's studies at the University of Amsterdam. Please let me know if it's needed to correct some grammar or rephrase some sentences. Thank you in advance!
-Mazi

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University of Amsterdam
The Graduate School of Communication
Admissions office

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I am hereby applying for the Master’s programme in Corporate Communication at the University of Amsterdam starting in September 2017. At the following letter I would like to present my motivation to study at UvA and explain why I am suitable candidate for it.


First of all, I would like to give you some background information about myself. I am from Poland and in 2014 I graduated from the Faculty of Economics and Sociology at the University of Lodz (Poland) and got my Bachelor Degree in Economics. I gained the methodological knowledge in the field of sociology which enables me to prepare a wide variety of advanced reports and analysis. I have also learnt how to solve problems effectively, which can be easily implemented in an everyday business practice.


Moreover during my studies I have joined the recognized student’s organization – Student’s Invest Fund.I wanted to do something more, to lead a group and take a part in something meaningful. My commitment was quickly rewarded and I got the possibility to coordinate projects and then to take up a position of the President of the Board of Directors. With a succesful conclusion, I have coordinated and organized numerous projects, for instance soft skills courses for students or charity concerts. I was responsible mainly for research and market analysis,visual communication, slogans,offers and liasing with partners.


I am highly driven and motivated, I work hard and devote myself to the projects I participate in to make my dreams come true. My goal has always been to study in an international environment. Finally I have a chance to continue my education in a mayor European Center for communication research. University of Amsterdam is highly ranked and provides a very high standard of education. I am passionate about humans behavior. It is fascinating how people use communication to generate meaning across diverse contexts with all the consequences that happen as a result. I would like to gain a professional knowledge how this process works in the field of corporates, how do they create their strategies of communication, relate with other objects and control the public picture.


In 2013 I took part in an international programme for students “Camp Leaders”. It provided me an opportunity to work and travel around the USA for a few months. This experience made me improve my language skills as well as organisational and time management techniques.Thanks to it I have become more open-minded and also more confident in direct contact with people. This adventure inspired me to next journeys and to live and study abroad. Currently I live in Amsterdam - multicultural city which gives many career and education development opportunities.


Thank you for considering my application.

Yours sincerely,
MM​

 

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Hello Mazi, and welcome to the forum.

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Admissions office
Graduate School of Communication
University of Amsterdam


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I am hereby applying for the Master [STRIKE]programme [/STRIKE]in Corporate Communication programme at the University of Amsterdam starting in September 2017. [STRIKE]At the following letter I would like to present my motivation to study at UvA and explain why [/STRIKE][STRIKE]I am suitable candidate for it. [/STRIKE]

[STRIKE]First of all, I would like to give you some background information about myself.[/STRIKE] I am from Poland, and in 2014, I graduated from the Faculty of Economics and Sociology at the University of Lodz (Poland) [STRIKE]and got my[/STRIKE] with a bachelor's degree in economics. I have since gained [STRIKE]the methodological[/STRIKE] substantial knowledge in the field of sociology, which enables me to prepare a wide variety of advanced reports and carry out various analyses. I also have a proven track record of providing [STRIKE]also learnt how to solve[/STRIKE] practical and effective solutions to various business problems. [STRIKE]effectively, which can be easily implemented in an everyday business practice. [/STRIKE]

Moreover, during my studies I [STRIKE]have[/STRIKE] joined [STRIKE]the recognized student’s organization –[/STRIKE] Student Invest Fund which is an organization that helps students with investment matters. I wanted to do something more, to lead a group and take part in something meaningful. My commitment was quickly rewarded [STRIKE]and I got the possibility[/STRIKE] when I was asked to coordinate projects, and then to take up the position of [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] President of the Board of Directors. [STRIKE]With a succesful conclusion,[/STRIKE] I have also coordinated and [STRIKE]organized numerous[/STRIKE] supervised several other projects, [STRIKE]for instance[/STRIKE] ranging from soft-skills courses for students [STRIKE]or[/STRIKE] to charity concerts. I was responsible mainly for research and market analysis, visual communication, slogans, promotional offers and liaising with partners.

I am highly driven and motivated; I work hard and devote myself to the projects I work on [STRIKE]participate in[/STRIKE] to ensure a successful and timely outcome. [STRIKE]make my dreams come true.[/STRIKE] My goal has always been to study in an international environment. Finally, I have a chance to continue my education in a major European center for communication research.The University of Amsterdam is highly [STRIKE]ranked[/STRIKE] renowned and provides a very high standard of education. I am passionate about the study of human behavior. It is fascinating how people use communication to generate meaning across diverse contexts with all the consequences that entails. [STRIKE]happen as a result.[/STRIKE] I would like to gain a professional knowledge of how this process works, particularly in the field of corporate business, and how [STRIKE]do they[/STRIKE] business professionals create their strategies of communication, relate with other [STRIKE]objects[/STRIKE] stakeholders and [STRIKE]control[/STRIKE] manage the public image of the business. [STRIKE]picture.[/STRIKE]

In 2013, I took part in an international programme for students called Camp Leaders. It provided me an opportunity to work and travel around the USA for a few months. [STRIKE]This[/STRIKE] That experience [STRIKE]made[/STRIKE] helped me improve my English language skills as well as organisational and time-management techniques. Thanks to it, I have also become more open-minded and [STRIKE]also[/STRIKE] more confident in direct contact with people. [STRIKE]This adventure[/STRIKE] It inspired me to look forward to my next journey and to aspire to live and study abroad. Currently, I live in Amsterdam - a wonderful multicultural city which gives many career and education development opportunities.

Thank you for considering my application.

Yours faithfully,

Daniel Czyzewsky

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Yours sincerely,
MM.
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