Would you like me to offer some convenient time to visit?

angelene001 · Feb 11, 2013

I feel that something is missing here and someone reading this won't understand what I have in mind.

It's a semi-formal letter. I'd like to invite someone from abroad to visit me in my country. First, I write that this person is welcome to come to my country and spend a few days. And then:

Would you like me to offer some convenient time to visit?

What's wrong here? What should I change or add?

Would you like me to offer you some convenient time for your visit? --> Is this better?

I'm not sure about the use of "time" here.
Maybe I should write "convenient dates".

billmcd · Feb 11, 2013

angelene001 said:
I feel that something is missing here and someone reading this won't understand what I have in mind.

It's a semi-formal letter. I'd like to invite someone from abroad to visit me in my country. First, I write that this person is welcome to come to my country and spend a few days. And then:

Would you like me to offer some convenient time to visit?

What's wrong here? What should I change or add?

Would you like me to offer you some convenient time for your visit? --> Is this better?

I'm not sure about the use of "time" here.
Maybe I should write "convenient dates".

One possibility- "Here are some dates that would be best for me (and my schedule)."

BobK · Feb 11, 2013

:up: I don't see what you have to lose by offering them directly, rather than saying "would you like me to offer some". I suppose you're afraid of seeming 'pushy'. But why not leave it up to the recipient - who can after all say 'I don't think a meeting would be appropriate' (if that's the way they feel! ;-))

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angelene001 · Feb 11, 2013

billmcd said:
One possibility- "Here are some dates that would be best for me (and my schedule)."

Thank you

However, I'd really appreciate it if someone could correct the original sentence and make it acceptable.

BobK · Feb 11, 2013

Your suggested wording is OK. But what we are saying is it's unusual in our business culture to waste time with feigned deference. In the time of Dickens it was acceptable to say things like

If you could vouchsafe a few moments from your busy schedule to grace your humble servant with an audience, I might suggest some times from which you could choose one at your convenience and oblige the undersigned. Only say the word and your wish is my command, although I would not presume to waste your precious time with suggestions that might in the event be considered untimely.

Nowadays we just say things like 'Here are some suggested times...' ;-)

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angelene001 · Feb 11, 2013

BobK said:
Your suggested wording is OK.

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You mean this one:

Would you like me to offer you some convenient dates for your visit?

This one is gramatically correct, isn't it?

Can I replace "dates" with "times"? Is it correct?
Would you like me to offer you some convenient times for your visit?

Maybe the original sentence is correct? I'm interested in grammatical point of view.
Would you like me to offer some convenient time to visit?

Let's say I would like to sound like someone from the time of Dickens

Please, don't focus on the style. I'm interested in grammar here.

5jj · Feb 11, 2013

angelene001 said:
Please, don't focus on the style. I'm interested in grammar here.

And most of our members are interested in whether something is grammatical and sounds natural and acceptable in today's English. Would you like me to offer some convenient time to visit? is I suppose grammatically correct, but there I see little point in coming up with something that sounds a little unnatural.

BobK · Feb 13, 2013

:up:

angelene001 said:
You mean this one:

Would you like me to offer you some convenient dates for your visit?

This one is gramMatically correct, isn't it? :up:

Can I replace "dates" with "times"? Is it correct? Either. I prefer 'dates', unless they're all on the same day.
Would you like me to offer you some convenient times for your visit?

Maybe the original sentence is correct? I'm interested in grammatical point of view.
Would you like me to offer some convenient time to visit? Sounds as though you'll only be suggesting one.

Let's say I would like to sound like someone from the time of Dickens
Please, don't focus on the style. I'm interested in grammar here.

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