Correct the sentences please?

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bspkumar

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Could you please tell me the correct sentence in the following sentences?
If both were wrong, suggest me best way to construct the sentence.

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1.This movie is about a young woman from an orthodox Hindu family, called Deepthi who marries a young business man against her will due to the pressure from her family.

2.This movie is about a young woman called Deepthi from an orthodox Hindu family who marries a young business man against her will due to the pressure form her family.
 

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Could you please tell me the correct sentence in the following sentences?
If both were wrong, suggest me best way to construct the sentence.

Thank you.

1.This movie is about a young woman from an orthodox Hindu family, called Deepthi who marries a young business man against her will due to the pressure from her family.

2.This movie is about a young woman called Deepthi, from an orthodox Hindu family, who marries a young business man against her will due to the pressure form her family.
#2 is OK, I think it's better with the commas.
 

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It is "businessman". No blank between "business" and "man".
 

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Thank you all for the reply.
 
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