[General] The check

[meela]

We had sent a check for $ 1000/- to you on 28th August 2010 through a reliable courier service. Kindly let me know when you have received it. Please send $ 500 to Mr. Joki that amount I own to him & remaing $ 500 keep with you as your commission.


Does the above context makes any sense??? Please correct where correction is nessary.

 

[Plugged]

Not a teacher.

We've sent a check of $ 1000.00 to you on 08/28/2010 through a reliable courier service. Kindly let me know once you receive it. Please send $500.00 to Mr. Joki, as that's the amount I own him, and keep with you the remaining $500.00, as your commission.

 

[jiamajia]

At least I think own should be owe in the given context.

 

[emsr2d2]

We had sent a check for $ 1000/- to you on 28th August 2010 through a reliable courier service. Kindly let me know when you have received it. Please send $ 500 to Mr. Joki that amount I own to him & remaing $ 500 keep with you as your commission.


Does the above context makes any sense??? Please correct where correction is nessary.

On 28th August 2010, we sent a cheque for $1000 to you, via a reliable courier service. Please let me know when you receive it. Upon receipt, please send Mr Joki the $500 that I owe him. You may keep the remaining $500 as your commission.

 

[jiamajia]

On 28th August 2010, we sent a cheque for $1000 to you, via a reliable courier service. Please let me know when you receive it. Upon receipt, please send Mr Joki the $500 that I owe him. You may keep the remaining $500 as your commission.

How about 'upon cashing' replacing 'upon receipt'?

 

[Plugged]

Sorry, my bad about the owe.