I made a story

[Prito]

I made a story.

I woke up 7am. Then i went to the restroom .Then I had brush and took shower.
About 8am i had my breakfast.I read the newspaper while taking breakfast.
After that I went to school. My school time was 9am. I was little late in to school. Lunch break was around 1pm.Around 4pm my school was over.Then I came home. Then I had to cook my dinner.But I am so tired today.Thats why I ordered cheese pizza. After that I turned on the tv. And watched movie as eating pizza. Then I slept around 10pm.

Please tell me my mistakes. I am very thankful to you.

 

[billmcd]

I made a story.

I woke up at 7am. Then I went to the [STRIKE] restroom [/STRIKE] bathroom ("restroom" would be considered a public facility) .Then I [STRIKE] had brush [/STRIKE] (? Do you mean "brushed my teeth/hair?) and took a shower.
About 8am I had my breakfast and I read the newspaper while taking breakfast.
After that I went to school. My school time was 9am. I was a little late [STRIKE] in [/STRIKE] to school. Lunch break was around 1pm. Around 4pm my school was over.Then I came home. Then I had to cook my dinner. But I am so tired today.That's why I ordered a cheese pizza. After that I turned on the TV. And watched a movie [STRIKE] as [/STRIKE] while eating pizza. Then I [STRIKE]slept[/STRIKE] retired (or "went to bed") around 10pm.

Please tell me my mistakes. I am very thankful to you.

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[Prito]

Thanks once again.
Your advice is very helpful.