[Essay] I hope anyone to correct my letter .

[Farahahmed]

Dear Hoda,

Hi sweetie ! I miss you beyond superlative. So,finally I decided to put pen to paper and pour out my updates. Well, I have just won all inclusive holiday in any place I choose. Can you believe it ? I think your jaw droped in amazement.

Ofcourse, I choose Maldives , the most luxurious majestic destination of all time. I can't hold myself together, me going to my dream island Maldives. I have punched my face a multiple time to check that I am not dreaming.This island that I only see its pictures on internet and television , I will go in person and see this place in my own eyes.

I have been two days dreaming I am walking along the beach and watching how the colour of sea changing as the cloud passing by , from dark blue to emerald green and then dirty grey.The surf crashing onto the foreshore , accelerated by gentle breeze, the water, as it rippled through the shingle was playing a melodic tune and the water splashing across my face . The people laughing , dancing and laying on the sand bronzing their skin. At the matter of fact , this holiday will not be perfect without the life and the soul of the party , you my alter ego. It will be flawless! We will have a ball and I will never skip a minute without taking a selfie. I am sure that you will agree to go with me, cause you know we will have the time of our lives .Beside, you worship partying and we will paint the town red. But , don't tell you mother you going to party , she might blow a fuse .

The flight is after five days , pack your bags and do little shopping.I am really eager to go to this holiday with belts on ! I can sense this holiday will be a blast.

 

[emsr2d2]

Dear Hoda,

Hi sweetie! I miss you [STRIKE]beyond superlative[/STRIKE] more than words can say. So, finally I decided to put pen to paper and pour out my updates. Well, I have just won an all-inclusive holiday [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] to any place I choose. Can you believe it? I think your jaw just dropped in amazement.

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The flight is [STRIKE]after[/STRIKE] in five days so pack your bags and do a little shopping. I am really eager to go [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] on this holiday - with [STRIKE]belts[/STRIKE] bells on! I can sense this holiday will be a blast.

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