[Grammar] REPLYING TO JOB RELATED EMAIL?

[JohnAlia]

Hello...
I received an email response from a job (Magazine editor) I applied couple of weeks ago. The HR people now have sent me and invitation for taking an article writing test and have asked me to reply if the suggested time for the test suits me or not. I just want to make sure that I didn't make any grammatical mistakes. Thank you for checking for me….


John


Dear Ms. ***,


Thank you for reviewing my resume and for the invitation you sent me for the article writing test. With excitement and confident, the time for the test is fine to me, and I am available at your convenience on ****day, Jan ** at 9:00 am.


Again, thank you for your consideration and I am looking forward for the article writing test.


Best Regards,
****

 

[Tarheel]

Hello...
I received an email response from a job (Magazine editor) I applied for a couple of weeks ago. The HR people now have sent me an invitation for taking an article writing test and have asked me to tell them if the suggested time for the test suits me or not. I just want to make sure that I didn't make any grammatical mistakes. [STRIKE]Thank you for checking for me….[/STRIKE]


John

Dear Ms. ***,


Thank you for reviewing my resume and for the invitation you sent me for the article writing test. With excitement and confidence, the time for the test is fine for me, and I am available at your convenience on ****day, Jan ** at 9:00 am.


Again, thank you for your consideration and I am looking forward for the article writing test.


Best Regards,
****

 

[TheParser]

Dear Ms. Smith:


Thank you very much for reviewing my resume and for the invitation.

I look forward to taking the test on January 27, 2015, at 9:00 a.m.

Sincerely yours,


John Alia

***** NOT A TEACHER *****


Hello, Mr. Alia:

1. I have made some suggestions above.

a. Personally, I feel that a colon (:) is more business-like in the salutation.

b. I believe that the shorter the note, the bigger the impact on the reader.

c. I do not feel that you should mention your excitement and confidence.

d. Since she knows what invitation you are referring to, it is unnecessary to mention its contents.



James

 

[JohnAlia]

***** NOT A TEACHER *****


Hello, Mr. Alia:

1. I have made some suggestions above.

a. Personally, I feel that a colon (:) is more business-like in the salutation.

b. I believe that the shorter the note, the bigger the impact on the reader.

c. I do not feel that you should mention your excitement and confidence.

d. Since she knows what invitation you are referring to, it is unnecessary to mention it.



James

Dear James,

Thank you very much for your suggestions and personally I loved it You are absolutely right, that shorter the note, bigger the impact on the reader. Again Thank you very much for your time and for your kind effort. GOD BLESS YOU.

Best Regards,
John Alia

 

[Grumpy]

I would leave out the "2015" in your response. It's unlikely that you have been invited to take the test in 2016...

 

[lotus888]

Point well taken. However, seeing that it's in January, I might leave the 2015 there. The year has just changed.


--lotus