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The world is consuming natural resources faster than they can be renewed. Therefore, it is important that products are made to last. Governments should discourage people from constantly buying up-to-date or fashionable products.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.


In today’s world exploitation and exploration of natural resources, at its peak for the sake of personal benefit. This is an alarming situation and there is dire need of taking precautionary measures. Despite of this, I did not agree to some extent to limit the use of modern products and encourage companies to make long lasting products. By doing so, we are compromising safety issues and depriving people to take benefits from modern and advance technology.


There is no doubt that modern products are designed in accordance to latest technology and safety measures. For instance, todays car are much better in performance and more secure than older cars, as new car have state of the art features such as air bag, camera and internet connectivity etc. Those functions make car more reliable and durable and comfortable for its users. Additionally, being as a part of modern and diverse world, one should be equipped with modern products to create ease and comfort in their life.


Durable and long lasting products will create discrimination among people, as such products require huge amount for its development and would not be in reach of poor people. Moreover, this will have negative impact on new and inexperienced companies to develop kind of products that demand enormous funds and time. Thus, it will cause unemployment as not too many businesses would able to bear huge expenses.


To sum up, I would like to say that government should come up with pragmatic approach to devise alternative to natural resources than confiding people not to use latest and modern products.
 

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In today’s world [STRIKE]exploitation and[/STRIKE] exploration and exploitation of natural resources is at its peak, mostly for commercial gains. [STRIKE]for the sake of personal benefit.[/STRIKE] This is an alarming situation, and many argue that there is dire need for [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] taking [STRIKE]precautionary[/STRIKE] appropriate measures in the face of such unsustainable practices. [STRIKE]Despite of this,[/STRIKE] Nonetheless, I [STRIKE]did[/STRIKE] do not agree that the solution is [STRIKE]to some extent to[/STRIKE]limiting the use of modern products and encouraging companies to make long-lasting products. By doing so, we are compromising safety [STRIKE]issues[/STRIKE] and depriving people [STRIKE]to take benefits from[/STRIKE] of modern and advanced technology.

There is no doubt that modern products are designed in accordance [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] with the latest technology and safety standards. [STRIKE]measures.[/STRIKE] For instance, today's cars are much better in performance and [STRIKE]more secure[/STRIKE] safer than older cars, and new cars have state-of-the-art features such as air bag, camera and internet connectivity etc. Those functions make the car more reliable, [STRIKE]and[/STRIKE] durable and comfortable for its users. [STRIKE]Additionally, being as a part of modern and diverse world, one should be equipped with modern products to create ease and comfort in their life.[/STRIKE]

On the other hand, durable and long-lasting products will create discrimination among people, as such products require [STRIKE]huge amount[/STRIKE] enormous resources for [STRIKE]its[/STRIKE] their development and would not be within the reach of poor people. Moreover, this will have a negative impact on new and inexperienced companies to develop [STRIKE]kind of[/STRIKE] products that demand enormous funds and time. Thus, it will cause unemployment as not too many businesses would able to bear such huge expenses.

To sum up, I would like to say that governments should come up with a pragmatic approach to devise alternative solutions to the depletion of natural resources other than [STRIKE]confiding[/STRIKE] discouraging people from using [STRIKE]not to use latest and[/STRIKE] modern products.
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Thank you so much for your comments.

Please answer the following questions.

exploitation and exploration and exploitation : what is wrong with the order?


today's and todays are not same?

Additionally, being as a part of modern and diverse world, one should be equipped with modern products to create ease and comfort in their life.

whats wrong with this line??
 

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- Logically, exploration would occur before exploitation.

- "Todays" is not a word.

- In my opinion, the sentence I crossed out did not add any new information to the paragraph.
 

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Alright, You comments are really helpful. Thank you once again.
 

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You're welcome fahad_a11. :)
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