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TOEFL essay -pls support by correcting my essay.preparing for exam pls urgent!!!!!
Please give me a score from 1 to 5 according to TOEFL grading system after correcting it.Thank you
People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
College plays an important role in our lives.It can provide a high education for every one of us. In my opinion, studying in college can attain new experiences, career preparation, and increased knowledge. I will explore the reasons why I feel this way in the following essay.
To begin with, we can acquire new experiences from attending a college.Sometimes, the college will organize an event for the students to take part of it, so that, we can gain more experiences from the event. For example, my sister's college planned a show to perform in annual dinner. She must prepare everything well on time and arrange the roles for each student.
Moreover, career preparation is vital for everybody; it can also be started in college. Oftentimes, the college stations us in a multinational company to work as an intern. For instance, my brother was studying Business Administration in a college.Then, he was sent to a company to work as an intern. The manager of the company had taught him so much of social skills. Now, he did not feel embarrassing socialize with everyone else.
Furthermore, learning in college can assist us to get a holistic knowledge from every facet of education. We will pursue more credits at freshman and sophomore year in order to take our favourite courses, so, we grab this opportunity to join more courses in the college and increase our knowledge directly. Three years ago, I studied Mathematic in college but the credits that I scored was unsatisfied for me. On that day onwards, I intended to join more courses to achieve more credits. On the other hand, I had learnt a lot of new knowledge from other courses.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people who attend to the college will be taught effectively and efficiently. I can guarantee that we will be provided many advantages when we study in college. I think that these reasons are reasonable for everyone who attend to the college.
Please give me a score from 1 to 5 according to TOEFL grading system after correcting it.Thank you
People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
College plays an important role in our lives.It can provide a high education for every one of us. In my opinion, studying in college can attain new experiences, career preparation, and increased knowledge. I will explore the reasons why I feel this way in the following essay.
To begin with, we can acquire new experiences from attending a college.Sometimes, the college will organize an event for the students to take part of it, so that, we can gain more experiences from the event. For example, my sister's college planned a show to perform in annual dinner. She must prepare everything well on time and arrange the roles for each student.
Moreover, career preparation is vital for everybody; it can also be started in college. Oftentimes, the college stations us in a multinational company to work as an intern. For instance, my brother was studying Business Administration in a college.Then, he was sent to a company to work as an intern. The manager of the company had taught him so much of social skills. Now, he did not feel embarrassing socialize with everyone else.
Furthermore, learning in college can assist us to get a holistic knowledge from every facet of education. We will pursue more credits at freshman and sophomore year in order to take our favourite courses, so, we grab this opportunity to join more courses in the college and increase our knowledge directly. Three years ago, I studied Mathematic in college but the credits that I scored was unsatisfied for me. On that day onwards, I intended to join more courses to achieve more credits. On the other hand, I had learnt a lot of new knowledge from other courses.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people who attend to the college will be taught effectively and efficiently. I can guarantee that we will be provided many advantages when we study in college. I think that these reasons are reasonable for everyone who attend to the college.
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