[Vocabulary] Check the text

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Being volunteer in Espaces NGO gives me opportunity to participate in Art club meetings organize cultural meetings and promote interest in culture & develop youths's awareness about their own creative potential. I choose topics from traditional up to conceptual art which are challenging,unusual and inspiring,those that fill youths with passion.
 

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Say, Please check the text.
 

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Being a volunteer in Espaces NGO gives me the opportunity to participate in Art club meetings, organize cultural meetings,[STRIKE]and[/STRIKE] promote interest in culture [STRIKE]&[/STRIKE] and develop youths'[STRIKE]s[/STRIKE] awareness about their own creative potential. I choose topics ranging from traditional [STRIKE]up[/STRIKE] to conceptual art, which are challenging, unusual and inspiring [STRIKE]those that[/STRIKE] and fill youths with passion.
 

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I choose topics ranging from traditional [STRIKE]up[/STRIKE] to conceptual art, which are challenging, unusual and inspiring [STRIKE]those that[/STRIKE] and fill youths with passion.
I think the comma before 'which' can be omitted because the relative clause can be restrictive.
 

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The comma should not be there. She chooses topics which are challenging ...
She's not asserting that all topics from traditional up to conceptual art are challenging, etc.
 
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