brianbrian
Junior Member
- Joined
- Aug 1, 2014
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- French
- Home Country
- France
- Current Location
- Canada
I would like to write down my sentences below.
(1) John felt embarrassed about swearing with his friends in front of his girlfriend. They told him a lot of jokes to help reduce his embarrassment.
(2) Mary asks Tom, "Where is Andrew? I haven't seen him for a long time." He replies, "He is now in France for a holiday (or for a vacation)."
I showed the sentences to my native-English speaking neighbor. He said that both examples read awkwardly, but he didn't explain what went wrong.
Could someone please explain my mistakes? Thank you very much.
(1) John felt embarrassed about swearing with his friends in front of his girlfriend. They told him a lot of jokes to help reduce his embarrassment.
(2) Mary asks Tom, "Where is Andrew? I haven't seen him for a long time." He replies, "He is now in France for a holiday (or for a vacation)."
I showed the sentences to my native-English speaking neighbor. He said that both examples read awkwardly, but he didn't explain what went wrong.
Could someone please explain my mistakes? Thank you very much.